Darling,
I say to you,
it hurts,
it pangs our insides
and we can't stop crying
Blaming yourself
serves no purpose
and neither does
the rapist
Darling,
heal as time passes by,
grow stronger,
and forever be altered
Darling,
try to see the beauty
in your sadness
because there truly is
A contest entry
- The beauty of pain. by Jai Guru Deva.
700 points, ended August 6, 2007, 81 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Break My Heart by Delete this polease.
600 points, ended July 2, 2007, 45 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A wonderful message. You have to see the good ineverything that happens. Even rape though its a really small good. I know because I wish this had been the poem I read after it happened to me so I would have found the good instead of focusing on the bad. Thanks for entering.
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Cadm this read almost like a prayer to help the person trhough their ordeal. Sad but so beautiful in its message! A very emotional and powerful poem!
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Truly deserve a pat on your back for expression such a work and summiting out here for others to go through
Take care;
Pretty.
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First, before I say anything, PLEASE ADD THE OPTION! I can't consider you for this contest until you put the option on the author's notes or reply to me with the number. Thank you.
Now onto the poem...I really like this. I use repetition a lot in my poems to keep the reader's interest and also to add kind of an allure. I like that. Good imagery. I liked it a lot. The first verse is my favorite.
Congratulations for keeping my interest! lol. Good job and good luck -
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OPTION 1. I want to see beauty in pain. Write me something deep, personal, and moving. I want imagery and feeling.
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this poem is based on my own experience with rape, and i know the contest holder isn't speaking of rape, i just used my example to let her know that she is not alone.
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