Glowing red eyes burn from my soul,
lusting greedily to destroy what's whole.
I keep it in check but it grows strong,
goading and coaxing me to do what is wrong.
Gnashing teeth hit when I resist its desire.
It hurts me, cuts me, sets my mind on fire.
I've begged and pleased for my demon to cease,
but he is adamant to deny me my peace.
I lie! I cheat! I smoke! I drink!
I push myself to the very brink
of how much I can take. My demon yells more!
He still yells it now, I've no clue what's in store.
Author notes
I know it's short but I suppose it sums up how I feel about the side of me that just loves so much to be so bad. Damn you, Otherside!
A contest entry
- Out of control by Andu.
450 points, ended June 13, 2007, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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hehe, well maybe you let that side reign free more easily then i do, wish i'd let my demon loose. good one on ya.
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Hood-Winked!
I think we all have our bad side and at times in our lives it comes out more. Such a thought provoking write. It raises many questions for one. I so enjoyed reading. Keep up the amazing writing
You have just been Hood-Winked courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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Hood-Winked!
ahhh .. I've been here before (the poem, lol)
I seemed to have missed a few things ... it's unbelievably unbelievable how short my comment was...
"Gnashing teeth hit when I resist its desire.
It hurts me, cuts me, sets my mind on fire."
Hmm .. that has powerful imagery in it's place. Absolutely wonderful write...
now if only I can give you an appluase again..
NeveR ♥
ps: You have been hood-winked - courtesy of The Poetic Bandits! -
you write
very amazingly
i like it
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it may be short but it sums up a lot of feelings great job like always
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Wow! I love the metaphor, for that part of us that.. that strong desire within us that we cannot control. This poem is full of imagery and emotion, very intense words and feelings you get across here.
The rhyme and the meter are awesome too, you put an effort into this poem and it really paid off.
Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck! -
woah, intense, i love it! very cool, and i pretty much know what this is like. for me it's trying to bite my tongue, which is pretty damn hard to do sometimes. great job!
The Dreamer
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This has great imagery and it's very easy to read. I love the message and how you describe it. Great job!
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i like this. its got a great sound and i like the poem as a whole. great job
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sweetheart
sweetheart talk to me whenever i'm always around and you know my number.
i will be the one to hold you when you fall as that is what a wife does.
♥ Wifey
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You know ... I have no words for this
Except that you did a good job
keep it up
love,
NeveR ♥
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