a realization within a breath
--just breathe in
transpose from disorder to tranquility;
a (pause)......for new reasoning,
trepidation and confusion will soon settle
transcending fate and karma-
from its peak to descent
c
a
s
c
a
d
e to the underbelly
falling in by lone digits (1 x 1 x 1)
hand in hand to a final sum
from beaten to broken, from apex
to nether to the wet pool of pattern
you envision the circumference:
(π x 2r = c) while (c = amity)
--o p e n your eyes
you find symmetry in the equation
by the two halves to a whole
--on your own accord,
concentrate on the moment
and focus on your metamorphosis
as you begin blooming to iconic illumination
the energy transforms to kinetic;
beyond this transparency will lead
to the elimination of plausible denial
of the only true number: 1
now no longer o-b-s-c-u-r-e-d
Author notes
Experimental for contest. "Obscured" was meant to have a line through it, as I wrote this in Word, and realized I couldn't do that on the post. So that's as close as it gets.
In a list
A contest entry
- Experimental and Visual by Anastasiya.
687 points, ended June 27, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wowza. Not one for math myself, but this is much more than math. "falling in by lone digits (1 x 1 x 1)
hand in hand to a final sum
from beaten to broken, from apex
to nether to the wet pool of pattern"
Dear lord I need to change my pants. Nice gold trophy, shiny...and deserved.
Fine Work Radical,
-Creatress
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I'm speechless. What a poetic mathematics! Very visual. I think that's what I am looking for in a poem. You definitely made it to my list of finalists.
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Wow - this is really so very good
Oh my. I went through this slowly, absorbing all of it. Really really well done. The only true number is 1 because, that's really all you have. Wow. Very very good. ~Pamela
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For being experimental, I thought you did an amazing job with this. It's unlike anything I've ever read before, but I love the flow of it. As far as experimental goes, I'm a fan!
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This is a very different kind of write. It made me stop and think after each stanza. Biology and geometry class kept coming into mind. I wonder why, eh? This is brilliant. Everything flowed in the odd format you used, instead of standard stanzas.
"--on your own accord,
concentrate on the moment
and focus on your metamorphosis
as you begin blooming to iconic illumination"
Perfection.
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Thank you for being experimental. A good friend of mine recently told me that in a few years poems will be written in integers. I once experimented with Number/Math poems - there is something intriguing about trying to connect them. Mr. Pound wrote poem equations and I recently learned that m.r. cummings weighed his vowel sounds.
"to the wet pool of pattern"
is my favorite line in this poem.
Making my first past through and leaving initial thoughts. Thanks again for dipping beyond ..
Lisa -
This was great. It made me smile, then it made me get my big brother to read it, then we talked about it. Mainly talking about the way you wrote this, which is simply amazing. Trust me you have to be an amazing writer for my brother to notice =] I mean that as a compliment, fully and truely. We both loved it, keep writing!
-Kaitlyn-
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You have a wonderful vocabulary, which I enjoy immensely, as it is not something one sees very often here on AP. That, coupled with a proclivity for the "different," I find your writing to be an interesting experiment, a journey as it were, into new dimensions of thought and observation.
You might check out the Oulipo, as I see many of their "games" in your own works. -
Oh love this....."concentrate on the moment
and focus on your metamorphosis
as you begin blooming to iconic illumination..." penned very well...a coming into its own piece...very insightful....well done, best of luck!
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Thank you for the kind words. I'm not quite sure how much I like this. It's definitely different for me.
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Good God well done! I have book marked this and will come back and comment more. Much enjoyed
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