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The Seduction

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The Seduction

While holding your hand in the evening breeze,
I long for your touch the feeling is strange.
A passionate kiss of love we exchange.
You gaze at my breast, this moment I seize.
My dress falls open, your eyes to appease,
My hips move to yours and I feel a change.
I’ll give of myself for love in exchange.
I look in your eyes so longing to please.
Then my dress falls off as if on its' own;
naked before you in the evening mist,
A longing to have you deep in my core.
For I never wanted to be alone,
and parts of my body long to be kissed,
Take me, abuse me,I beg you for more.

 

 

 

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The Italian (or Petrarchan) Sonnet:
The Italian sonnet is divided into two sections by two different groups of rhyming sounds. The first 8 lines is called the octave and rhymes: a b b a a b b a
The remaining 6 lines is called the sestet and can have either two or three rhyming sounds, arranged in a variety of ways: c d c d c d / c d d c d c / c d e c d e / c d e c e d /
c d c e d c

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  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    June 7, 2007

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    Wonderful

    Amera,
    You have again amazed me with such a lovely, sensual [sonnet]. The ryhme and rythm are masterful. Your words painted the picture to perfection and left the reader to invision the love and want that would take place.
    I love the following:
    "My dress falls open, your eyes to appease,
    My hips move to yours and I feel a change.
    I’ll give of myself for love in exchange.
    I look in your eyes so longing to please."

    Fantastic last line....

    "Take me, abuse me,I beg you for more."
    Your gentle senual words are pure pleasure.

    You don't need it because I see a GOLD here. However, I wish you the very best in the contest.
    Love,
    David




  • Rele anmwe
    June 6, 2007

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    This is a marvelous piece of work. I wish you the best of luck in the best. Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing


  • Spiritvision angel
    June 5, 2007

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    Your talents continue to brighten my days with words that flow and forms the delight the eyes. Thank you for sharing this my friend.


  • Swan song gold member
    June 5, 2007

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    This is extremly exotic and pains a beautiful sensaul picture. I can see this happening with the ease of th e wind. Two in love making love in an easy way.


  • blueyez
    June 4, 2007

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    What a beautiful backround!!!
    You have a knack for painting the most beautiful pictures! A pleasure to my senses!


  • poetryality silver member
    June 4, 2007

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    This is sultry. For some reason the; "abuse me" part made me cringe. Although I am sure it's just rough sex that you are asking for between two consenting adults. Other than that, the poem is sensual, and the form makes it all the more alluring. The best to you in the challenge my friend.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 4, 2007

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    Lovely, as you are.
    I will always think
    of you as my poetess.
    Welcome to my finalist
    list. Love, Lane


  • ellipsist
    June 4, 2007
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    beautiful - the form

    lends to this piece a rather delicate natural feeling flow...

    lovely, dark imagery!


  • LadyLavender gold member
    June 4, 2007
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    Amera, this is so beautiful. God...you're so talented!!!!


  • PerVirtuous
    June 4, 2007

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    I love the poem, a masterpiece. Beautiful rhyme and flow. But, just know what's gonna happen to this guy when I find him... Three bunnies!


  • StarEyes
    June 4, 2007

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    OK, I have never tried this type of writing, I prefer free verse to rhyme, when it comes to the writing itself. But you did a great job on this one my friend! Best of luck in this contest!!!!!!


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 4, 2007

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    Steamy! wonderfully beautiful!: a passonate kiss of love we do exchange...I give of myself for love...Really like this and the styal is great, never seen it before


  • Desire gold member
    June 4, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Queen of Form
    Brilliant Beauty with words to tease, tempt and please the reader into submission
    Loved it!!
    This Sonnet just rolled off Your tongue~~

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    June 4, 2007
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    This is the first time I've seen an Italian sonnet at AP & I like it! Is it iambic? If it's not, I might try it The odd rhyme patteren works well, although the flow isnt as smooth as an English sonnet. I like the content of this and the picture compliments it well.
    Thanks for sharing,
    Love you much,
    Laura


    • Amera gold member
      June 4, 2007
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      Thank you! Yes it's iambic but it does not have to be a pentameter like this one.

      The exact pattern of sestet rhymes (unlike the octave pattern) is flexible. In strict practice, the one thing that is to be avoided in the sestet is ending with a couplet (dd or ee), as this was never permitted in Italy, and Petrarch himself (supposedly) never used a couplet ending; in actual practice, sestets are sometimes ended with couplets (Sidney's "Sonnet LXXI given below is an example of such a terminal couplet in an Italian sonnet).

      The point here is that the poem is divided into two sections by the two differing rhyme groups. In accordance with the principle (which supposedly applies to all rhymed poetry but often doesn't), a change from one rhyme group to another signifies a change in subject matter. This change occurs at the beginning of L9 in the Italian sonnet and is called the volta, or "turn"; the turn is an essential element of the sonnet form, perhaps the essential element. It is at the volta that the second idea is introduced, as in this sonnet by Wordsworth:

      "London, 1802"

      Milton! thou shouldst be living at this hour:
      England hath need of thee: she is a fen
      Of stagnant waters: altar, sword, and pen,
      Fireside, the heroic wealth of hall and bower,
      Have forfeited their ancient English dower
      Of inward happiness. We are selfish men;
      Oh! raise us up, return to us again;
      And give us manners, virtue, freedom, power.
      Thy soul was like a Star, and dwelt apart;
      Thou hadst a voice whose sound was like the sea:
      Pure as the naked heavens, majestic, free,
      So didst thou travel on life's common way,
      In cheerful godliness; and yet thy heart
      The lowliest duties on herself did lay.
      Here, the octave develops the idea of the decline and corruption of the English race, while the sestet opposes to that loss the qualities Milton possessed which the race now desperately needs.

      A very skillful poet can manipulate the placement of the volta for dramatic effect, although this is difficult to do well. An extreme example is this sonnet by Sir Philip Sidney, which delays the volta all the way to L 14:


      • Laura Lamarca gold member
        June 4, 2007

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        Thank you for the indepth explanation sis, I'll certainly try this when I'm in a better frame of mind

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