A piercing cry
Heart rending sound
Where is she?
Where is she?!
Laid bare upon my breast
Fuzzy pink softness
Mutual hunger is sated
Eyes of clear blue
Warm skin joined again
One
Naked
Vulnerable
Wanted...
Baby girl
Happy tears.
Author notes
I suppose this fits all of the categories but I prefer it to be Vulnerable...thanks for this contest Lane...
A contest entry
- 1,000 POINTS...THREE OPTIONS by Dalaney.
1000 points, ended June 9, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wonderful
Very creative. The focus on piercing cry really set the pace for me on this piece.
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Thank you, Penman...there is no sound I have ever heard to match that of a newborn...it literally pierces the heart...I appreciate the read...Peace, Rhonda
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there is a pureness about your feelings that really go a long way with me with, "a piercing cry"! your truly, a blessed writer! always keep writing! your a voice that should be heard!
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I am humbled by your comment, poet friend...be well...Peace, Rhonda
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I love this. I want to know this better, let's act it out and maybe I'll get even more out of it...
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again....
...lol
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Now who is laying their vulnerability upon the page? I like the path of this write.
Buddy
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Haha...
I suppose stealing my comment is fair play?...lol...But seriously, thanks for the encouragement and I am pleased you like it. Peace, Rhonda
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Yes, it can fit all categories, but
I agree with you ... this feels more
vulnerable. Beautiful, it is, Rhonda.
Thank you so much for entering my
contest. Love, Lane
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Thanks for inviting me to this contest Lane. This is one I felt comfortable with. Glad you agree with the vulnerable option. Peaceful day, my friend, Rhonda
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Very impressive images, dear poet, very impressive and balanced wonderfully with a simple joy of love, affirmed by close, intimate contact – mother and child. A gem of a poem, a trophy contender for sure Blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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Dear Richard, It always brightens my day to find you here. Thank you for the encouraging words. I always appreciate your blessings, they mean so much. Peace be with you, Rhonda
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