Were I to transcribe what my elated spirit contains
Then for you my dear, I’d write a resplendent refrain
Such a song would begin very serene and replete
With trance like melodies to give your senses a treat
Then, a brief pause before this piece would progress,
Time enough to tell you, of my devotion and confess
That because of your love, my soul is now completed
And dark feelings of despair; have now been defeated
Yes, a composition of love would I croon at your whim
With heartfelt affection like a grand and soulful hymn.
In a list
A contest entry
- SHOW ME THE LOVE!!!! by Vampyric Kitten.
850 points, ended June 4, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything At All by Heavenly Angel.
26000 points, ended June 9, 2007, 100 entries
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400 points, ended June 25, 2007, 10 entries
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1000 points, ended July 5, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Master the short poem by Turtledove.
475 points, ended November 9, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Well done
Love your use of alliteration in this; I love the last line the best. Well done. -
Love is such a soothing sound. Thanks for your advice for my poem
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this is a very sweet piece. i do hope that this is a true love poem with someone to recieve it because it melts my heart away and i don't even know you. this is what romance is about i think. thank you for your entry. good luck
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For some reason it seems like this piece could have used another stanza... As if it was almost complete but not quite. However, that could be just me
. This is still a great piece and I'm glad to have stumbled upon it. I look forward to reading work from you in the future.
~ Wild
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Wow! This is soft, serene, beautiful and totally romantic
I think this is a fine sharing into the contest...thank you -
A meaningful song, one to capture her heart. You would pause long enough to tell her so. Wonderful lines, full of love. Good luck in your contest ~Sie

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