We used to be in Love,
you turned your back on me.
Said that it wasn't time yet,
you were too young still.
No major decisions need be made,
you crushed my heart into the dirt.
Oh, we will still be friends you said,
and the days slowly passed by.
Your still my best friend you said,
but how can that be?
Oh, "I'll call you next week",
and now 4 months have passed.
All the things you said we'd do,
you reneged on every one.
All the wonderful plans we made,
you threw them all away.
Never were going to follow through,
for a year I lived a lie.
You let me Love you,
broke my heart,
and laugh while I cry.
I told you I would wait for you,
forever if need be.
Now you say you have a boyfriend,
and it isn't me.
Shattered my heart, it feels like ribs,
& it still hurts to breathe.
Author notes
Yes, it's true.
~*~
Lost Love
Griswold
In a list
A contest entry
- Jack Hammer to the Heart by Poetic-Dreamer.
600 points, ended June 9, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - She sits in her corner singing herself to sleep wrapped around in the promises that no one seems to keep. by Starz of Heaven.
525 points, ended June 22, 2007, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Everyones A Winner! ^_^...except for the Losers by edit my world..
360 points, ended August 21, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Goodbye To Heartache. by Poetryintheblood.
700 points, ended February 9, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Abandonment by Sgt. Pepper.
550 points, ended May 17, 40 entries
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Aw;
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p.s I adore title!
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awww this is so sad im sorry to hear that this is true. some people just suck dont they? love the poem. thanks for the entry and goodluck in the contest
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thank you for your entry, obviously i stated that i prefered new poems, but prewrites were accepted.
this was very good
alex
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Very deep and sad! Sorry to hear that this is true for you. I wish you all the best in love and life.
Take care and good luck to you here!
Jeremy0826 -
Great Job
Flows quite well. written nicely. Best of luck!
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Thank you for your heartfelt piece, Josie
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I'm sorry to do this, but I DID ask. I said no swearing, but there was a swear word in you title! Good poem, but I need to go by the rules I set. Thanks anyway.
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ROFL, no worries, I'll change it to witch..
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this is really really good. it's well written & exactly what i asked for. i hope your ok now, i hate it when people play they will still be friends card.
thank you for entering my contest & best of luck
--Blessed be--
Shacadia Shay -
Wow; this was so heart-breaking but you've done a beautiful job at expressing it.
I really felt the emotion & pain within your words.
Great write!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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hahahahahhahaa that title makes my DAY! the rest of the poem is also equally amazing! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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Nice write, thank you for entering.
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lovely! but tell your self that YOU are pretty my bf tells me im pretty all the time. Dont forget to put ur AP name in the authors notes.
im sorry ur girl left you high and dry...and yes that makes her bitch. And i like how you didnt actually say that in your poem but you lead me to think that she was an evil little cow.
I get you though in 8th grade my boyfriend dumped me..and i was crushed because he had his best friend do it...he didnt have the balls to actually break up with me. So on my birthday which was the last day of school i heard he was looking for me but i left earlier. I asked him why did he breakup with me, this dude had the nerve to tell me it was because i was too safe and that we didnt do anything. Son of a Biscuit -
WOW!!
This is a very good write!! I know exactly what you are feeling right now. Im really sorry and it hurts like hell, i began to move on and then he started talking to me again last night at a party... Im really sorry! I hope things work out for you!! Keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!!
Shannon*Leah -
Beautiful
I love this it speaks right from the heart and there is so much raw emotion in the words that you speak I could almost hear your tears falling silently from your eyes I wrote a poem like this one once...All I'm saying is I may not have been where you have, but I definately know what a brokenheart feels like...
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OUCH!
painful experience!
and even more so when you find that she was using that lousy excuse to get away from you... and then even more when you find that she has another boy friend. what happened to "i'm too young"??
very sad ending...
oh a happier setting~ congratulations on the trophies that this poem won~ you must be proud of it.
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awww, im soprry this happend to you. sometimes people just dont see whats really there. this person should be glad to know a poet like you. someday you might be famouse and she wont be. this is a great poem and good luck!
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dude, f her. great write. felt the anguish. anger. saddening. fantastic!
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well first off, bc your name is kept unidentified, i at least need to kno your sn.. on your poetry i'd say pain is a bitch, and heartbreak is a dick. don't you hate it when shit happeneds like this? i could feel emotion, there was a bit of a rhyme,and it didn't seem, forced.. i liked it, but i want more detail, like something that may have happened that you could remember was special, now its all gone down the drain.. and i want you to put somewhere in there the name of the title.. just change up a few things, otherwise, how it is, i like it
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Wow heart break to the max
I hate when they say
"Oh, we will still be friends you said,"
Thanks for adding your poem to the contest and best wishes
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I REALLY love this. It's so great and no questioning why you won that trophy this is really great keep up the good work
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I loooove the title. This reminds me of my boyfriend....the first time we broke up, though he never loved me and I realized I never loved him either. The whole we'll stay friends and then avoiding you and then new girlfriend. Very familiar. I really like this in all of its sadness and pain. Thanks for entering.
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An eyeopener here! I think this is simular to how my ex felt when we broke up - we were both too young and I could see we wern't going anywhere but it took him a little longer to realise that. In my sitution tho; everyone ended up better off and happier for it.
Very well put together - you have done a great job of expressing your emotions. I love the ending. Got a big lump in my throat and a tear in my eye after reading this! Well done
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Yea! This is real good. I hope it's just poetry and no one really did that to you. You should have beat her.
blessings, extasy
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Cindy, Thanks for your kind comment, and Yes, It did happen to me.
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good!!
very neatly written in one long phrase about being heartbroken. cool.
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Thanks Meg, I appreciate the comments dear..Scott
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