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Dancing

With his lips on mine
We move slowly in rhythm
Small calm steps at first
The music takes us over
As we collide into one

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  • Swan song gold member
    June 17, 2007
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    Wow!


  • goddesskevauna
    June 10, 2007
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    Very nice! May I cut in? So simple and so sweet! What a nice touch!


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    June 8, 2007

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    Love it. In just these few lines you draw your reader in and we experience the dance with you. Very nicely done.