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Jonesing

cold sweat of hunger  
exposed, raw
unidentified jonesing jitter


no explanation
a need needs filling
but, I have it all
the usual two point two's
nuclear surroundings
no major melt downs

but the cake's in the rain
with betty crocker, susie homemaker
and all those other
whores of housewifery
regurgitating june's pearls

just once, I want my circular
la vida loca to snug up
inside the universal
square fucking hole

not bloodly likely

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Danna Hobart
    January 11, 2008

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    Brilliant allusions and metaphors, as well as clever word play in this. Thank you so much for entering my contest.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 1, 2007
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    how did I miss this one?

    Wow, Luna, just how normal can you be, June f'n Cleaver? ha, ha What a powerfully humorous write. You kicked normalcies ass to the curb.
    Loved it, Buddy

  • Improv Machinery
    June 26, 2007

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    wow

    i must say that i am intrigued. i really like this poem but i am little unclear as to what june's pearls are.


    • Luna Tique Fringe
      June 26, 2007
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      Thanks

      From the old tv show Leave it to Beaver(50's)...June Clever, Beaver's mom...'perfect' wife, mother, woman type. She always wore a string of pearls.


  • ellipsist
    June 24, 2007

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    good goddamn, girl!

    WOW! fucking amazing! I feel the intensity and passion and believe that this was QUITE well (& not to mention, powerfully) stated!


    • Luna Tique Fringe
      June 24, 2007
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      Thanks girl...I was in a mood, old relationship, it should have been good...safe, was about it though.


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 5, 2007

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    woohoo sister, rock on, been "Jonesing" most of my life, in one way or another...nice to see another pretty face in the mad rubber room with me...Love "whores of housewifery
    regurgitating june's pearls.." For I too have hated those leave it to beaver types once upon a time...I felt intense emotion with this kick butt rant/rave...see tells ya where my dam head is....


  • sheltered
    June 4, 2007

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    I cracked up on "square fucking hole". Love it. This is one of those cases where it just wouldn't have been the same without the foul language. Great visuals.


  • PerVirtuous
    June 4, 2007

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    Once again, I am compelled to share my massive ego with you by stating categorically: Three bunnies. (I bet you didn't even catch a quarter of that.)


  • tomisb
    June 4, 2007

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    My little filet mignon, so tired of being a peace offerning. Glad to see that even when you can't win you are bitching instead of whining Come sit with me on the roof top above the trees. Share the wine and enjoy the cheese. If the wind picks up it is likely we will freeze.
    Peace and Love, Tom B.


    • Luna Tique Fringe
      June 4, 2007

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      Let, me wipe the dust from the monitor here...did you just refer to me as a piece of meat? lol, well at least it wasn't hamburger, lol...


      • tomisb
        June 4, 2007
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        Human hamburger is not fun. I like to tease you and work my crazy word games because you catch on to at least half of what I put in them.
        T. B.


  • Quiet places
    June 4, 2007

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    Intense Write!!

    My monitor is steaming up, HA! Wow this is a mouthful. Sounds like the whole thought of dealing with it is out the window. Letting off steam never sounded easy. You did a great job of it, Don


    • Luna Tique Fringe
      June 4, 2007
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      Thanks, Don..you stick with me through thick and thin..wacked out and crazy, too..lol

      • Quiet places
        June 5, 2007
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        You are the whirlwind in my sails Kiddo!!!!! Never a dull moment, Don


  • Griswold silver member
    June 4, 2007

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    [Choking]

    LOL, well, this was a very interesting write for sure,
    "just once, I want my circular
    la vida loca to snug up
    inside the universal
    square fucking hole

    not bloodly likely"
    I spit soda all over my monitor at this one.... OMG you are good....Scott

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