Her words of passion
stripped away my armor
till I was utterly naked and powerless,
my flesh feeling the trembling anxious ache
from having no defense
against any possible knife
she might hide to use against my heart.
The air tingled more intensely,
as my awareness thrived,
having been so suffocated
underneath my iron sheath of mistrust.
Slowly, she explored my weak
and tender membrane of being,
tantalizing with the energy of love
sending ice cubes of biting ecstasy
through my being one second
and flames of desire the next.
Years of fighting stranger's stares
had dulled every sense and vein,
while I reached in my infant's need
for the dream I lusted so often
to become a caress's volcano.
Fear's spiders still gnawed at my insides,
keeping my armor safely in reach
just in case I start to bleed.
Author notes
For Option 2
A contest entry
- 1,000 POINTS...THREE OPTIONS by Dalaney.
1000 points, ended June 9, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow, that was quite tantalizing, I loved the metaphors, I felt they over powered me at times but if I had such a great command of vocabulary I might do the same the lines flowed quite poetically great job good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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This is indeed unique, and I think
it is remarkable as well. I felt
every single line in this poem -
sensual, yet kind of dark, too, which
can be a marvelous combination if done
well, and you, dear Poet, have done well.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Love, Lane
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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Oh wow This is excellent. Seems such a different sort of write I have been used to reading of yours. Very sensual yet with that hint of fear.
Great write. I wish you all the best with this.
Gaylene
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Thank you so much for the great comment. Just tried to make this from the inside.
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I like this alot well done. Good luck in the contest
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Thank you for the great comment.
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I like it
It is a good response to the contest, hope you have
good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for the contest.
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Whoa! This was awesome. I was getting more tense inside with each stanza, fearing along with you, that something bad MIGHT happen. This was sensual and so perfectly descriptive of deep psychological turmoil from past hurts.
I always love your poems, but I am SO impressed!! Awesome.
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment. You're always so kind.
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Dreams of lust became the caress of the volcano! Lovely line...Wonderful poem. Keep penning, ~Sie
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Thank you for the great comment.
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