Ring.
A little bell chimes,
Its melodic sounds resonate
in crystals and pin drops and love.
When the tears dry,
Remember your memories.
They'll be all you have.
They'll be all you want
[to get rid of.]
And as the emotions poor out,
In raves and rages and rants
of electricity in all it's glory,
(Sparks of color and bright,
bright energy)
The cage that surrounds your living muscle,
[the heart]
will be free.
We're waiting for the champagne
to break loose,
Pour and spurt from its captivity.
[Only it's not as good as a whisky.]
And as you watch how the world falls around you,
Crash down,
Break down,
It's all coming down,
Simple quotes come to mind,
The kind your parents said when you were [five].
"That's just the way the cookie crumbles,"
Only we all wish that it tasted as sweet as cookies.
And as the seconds turn to minutes,
And the minutes turn to hours,
And the hours turn to forever [is too long too wait,]
The world still turns on an axis
That seems to be invisible.
-But it's there. We learned it in school.
So we'll reach for the stars,
[We don't have to make it.]
And wait for a shooting one
to simmer down in rays of glitter
and sparkles,
[it dresses itself up better than we ever could.]
and catch it in the palms of our hands.
Waiting for a new day,
[because shooting stars only happen at night].
Author notes
"I swear in that moment, We were infinite"
This was a pleasure to write.
Thanks for the inspiration. :]
A contest entry
- Infinite, 10,000 points. by InfiniteCaitlin.
12000 points, ended July 2, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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And as the seconds turn to minutes,
And the minutes turn to hours,
And the hours turn to forever [is too long too wait,]
The world still turns on an axis
That seems to be invisible.
-But it's there. We learned it in school.
i love that part! i hope you win that 10000 pt contest...i really liked this poem. great job. -
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Nah.
The person doing the competition allready found other pieces she liked better. Haha. -
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you'll win if i had the same contest...for sure! l0l
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id leave a decent comment but i guess all i can say is wow. . . this is amazing. i hope your not wanting a critical comment because one a piece like this, i couldnt give any.
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Haha, Thanks. <3
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my poet friend, i'm so proud to be able to say i know you.
this is gorgeous. there's such wisdom in this, you don't seem at all your age. you glow with something in explicable.
darling i can only learn from this.
"And as the seconds turn to minutes,
And the minutes turn to hours,
And the hours turn to forever [is too long too wait,]
The world still turns on an axis
That seems to be invisible.
-But it's there. We learned it in school."
yep, the world'll keep spinning whether or not things happen the way we want them to.
anyways, gorgeous write.
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thank you nadia.
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"So we'll reach for the stars,
[We don't have to make it.]
And wait for a shooting one
to simmer down in rays of glitter
and sparkles,
[it dresses itself up better than we ever could.]
and catch it in the palms of our hands."
mmm, very good!
good luck in the contest!
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And as you watch how the world falls around you,
Crash down,
Break down,
It's all coming down,
Simple quotes come to mind,
The kind your parents said when you were [five].
"That's just the way the cookie crumbles,"
Only we all wish that it tasted as sweet as cookies.
hmm, I love that line, it really struck me. I dont know why but I liked it,
the first stanza was dazziling with the description. some of it was a little plain,and a little blan, but parts in this really sparkle and make me smile
I Feel Infinite when I read this piece, first one in the contest, good job... -
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Thanks a lot!
And I agree I didn't use as much description as I probably could have,
(Check out my piece, "Femme Fatale" for that)
but I'm really glad with how it turned out.
Thanks again. :]
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