She was mine, you took her from me
I look into your eyes, see what you see
Shaking, pulsating, convulsing anger
I'll tear your fucking throat out
She doesn't care, she wants to see me mad
She wants to see him beaten
I'll give her her wish, commit the ultimate sin
Kill this man standing before me
Knuckles to flesh, fist striking bone
Keep punching till he's recognized by no one
Teeth fly and blood spews
I'm going to make an example of you
Drag the lifeless carcass into the streets
Wrapped up in blood soaked bed sheets
Let the whole world see what’s been done
Don't anyone ever touch my woman
Now it's her turn… fucking whore
I've made one bleed now I want to see more
Turn up the heat, watch it glow
Face to hot steel, do it slow
Smell the flesh, burning, singing, screaming pain
It's enough to make a man insane
You filthy demonic slut
Leave you to die after I burn slash and cut
Bleeding face, charred lips
Scent of burning skin, bloody hips
She's crawling for help, no ones there
Drag her into the hallway by her fucking hair
Lay her on her back to see her eyes
She screams out for someone, no one to here her cries
Kick out her teeth, bite out her tongue
Now screaming but still no one
Kerosene, up and down the walls
Trail of gasoline down the hall
Spark the match and watch it burn
I'll see you all in hell when it's your turn!
A contest entry
- SCARE ME TO DEATH by thelovesongwriter.
410 points, ended June 6, 2007, 22 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Doll face, Now You See [Inside..] by LucyLightning.
600 points, ended June 13, 2007, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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oh my god that totally freaked me out..this is so intense and filled with hate...a good write but i hope none of this ever happened..whoa..scared me to death
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whew! that was unleashing!
wow...i'm still trembling just a little!
we actually have a court case in WA. with the soul
of this poems deed pending!
anger turns to fires of rage,
betrayal burns deep,
and all souls land in hell.
wise cautionary lesson in this poem indeed!
I am trying to learn to not "bottle-up" my anger
feelings...i think they blind us just a little..
to see only what we want.
great entry, gracious thank you for submitting
this flesh peeling poem!
ears/SEattle way to write! vivid and real!
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awesome man. that's very cool. A bit crazy, but that's how it should be. well, yeah man, this is awesome work you've got here... so good luck in the contest man.
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Very good, thankyou for entering...
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to put it easily:
i fuckin loved it.
mmfwcl
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Thank you very much, i'm glad you liked it. I got one quesiton though
mmfwcl?
Much Mother Fucking Wickid Clown Love? is that right?
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Smell the flesh, burning, singing, screaming pain
It's enough to make a man insane
You filthy demonic slut
Leave you to die after I burn slash and cut
This ... this scared the hell outta me. I have this issue with burning. lol. But I liked it it was very good. Thankyou for entering and good luck to you!!!
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Wow, demonic, macabre, and terrifying. This is full of skill and haunting bloodthirst. Awesome!
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holy fucking shit this was fucking scary! Good god. wow. Great piece. Hope you don't kill people. lol. Good luck in the contest!
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Oh hahaha, no darling. I don't kill people, i don't even get in fights anymore. I write and get all my emotions on paper and by the time i'm done i usually have exausted myself of all the bad feelings. I hope it does well, thank you for readying it
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whoaaaa this is goood.! Teeth fly and blood spews. <---crazy description! i can see all that's happening...and it is like hell!! ahh good job. and good luck!
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Thank you, this is one of my most rage induced peices
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holy crap! this is startling good. you put in the raw intensity of feeling. i would never want to piss you off!
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Thank you very much sweetheart. But pissing me off isn't a bad thing, i'm a big pussycat
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WOW!This was amazing,great anger!
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Thank you. I like to use my emotions to create an image
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