Born believing every man’s
words were nuggets of truth
Tell me a lie and I will believe
it into becoming true
Shy, timid
Wounded butterfly with
broken wings held together by a
God most don’t call their own
Take my money with honeyed
promises of repayment and I
will be waiting, sure it shall come
Take over my life
Mold me as you will
Demand
Deny
Rebuke
My vulnerable soul
is candle tallow to your flame
A contest entry
- 1,000 POINTS...THREE OPTIONS by Dalaney.
1000 points, ended June 9, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thank you for reading my work!
Comments
1 - 12 of 12
-
I read this with some sadness, Poet...but at the same time admiration. To know this will be done to you and to continue to be open...hard and thankless 'job', that. But one line resonates...'take over my life, mold me as you will'... this seems a prayer placed strategically inside the poem...may be just my hope, but I found this to be the treasured line here. Well written emotive write. Good luck in Lane's contest. Peace, Rhonda
-
-
Thank you
You have the sweetest face, and you are so pretty! Inside you is just as pretty.
Thank you for reading my work and leaving such a nice comment - it is always encouraging.
hugs Wolfie
-
-
I expect the best and this is what I get from you, dear Poetess. You are a wonderful writer, and I am thrilled to have you in the contest. This poem surely expresses vulnerability - and yes, I did feel it while reading. Thank you. Love, Lane
-
-
Thank you, Lane
As I read the first words I thought, uh oh... she doesn't find it good enough. Thank you for not saying that - LOL. You are one of my favorite poets in the world - and that isn't suck up!
Thank you, dear one.
hugs Wolfie
-
-
Nicely written of the insidiousness of others and some of us just are too blind to see it...i know the feeling of vulnerability all too well...Scott
-
-
Thank you, Mr. Junkman
I love junk - I am a pack rat of the highest order. Right now my little room is filled with things my neighbor who is moving wanted rid of. I will keep some and give some to several friends. I should have owned a junk shop...
Thank you for understanding what I was saying with my words. Vulnerability can rarely be cured... we just have to protect ourselves.
thanks for reading - Wolfie
-
-
Nice write Wolfie, good luck in Lane's contest, this one is well done. Love, C
-
-
Cannon
Thank you - it's a subject on which I am an expert.
hugs Wolfie
-
-
Awww, you shouldn't beat yourself up so, mommy. I think you are a wonderful person. Good luck to you in the contest.
-
-
My daughter
You are so darn sweet - but it is true - and old hens don't learn new tricks...LOL
Love Mommy
-
-
A wonderful write with excellant flow and meaning behind this, A great written portrait of
naitivity (sp?) Well done and good luck in lane contest
-
-
Thank you
I am glad you saw something in this. I appreciate your warm words!
hugs Wolfie
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 12 of 12
