The pain is real
The love is real
But to find it is hard
The journey is perilous
And your heart is broken along the way
You find many and you find none
But when you find the one
You cant be stopped
Not even by a gun
Have I found her?
I dont know
I have three in my heart
All three I love
One I date
And she owns my inner heart
One is military
And soon for boot camp will depart
One is wounded by someone close
So I help her anyway I can
The one I believe is there
But which I dont know
So my search continues
How will it go?
I'll let you know...
A contest entry
- SHOW ME THE LOVE!!!! by Vampyric Kitten.
850 points, ended June 4, 2007, 22 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Option 1
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Good poem that could have been a great poem, meaning I would have liked to see more imagery, still it flows well and shows promise. Love can be an on going battle to find, as I and many others can attest to. Congratulations on the silver win and thanks for sharing.
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Did you ever figure it out?
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absolutely true!
searching for the right soulmate is a lomg journey, with many heartbreak along the way. sounds good and flows well too
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i didnt really like it, i think you couldve done a better job on this.. its just not that great.. i woulve changed a few words and moved a few things around and made it an unbelievable poem.. i got the concept dont get me wrong, i got what it was about, i just didnt like the wording
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aww great write. seems so personal. love can be stopped when you take too much, i think i have taken too much now. this was such a good write though.
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it is personal its my real story
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aww kitty loves it.
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awww its cute (to me im strange not derangeed ha ha) i like it good job you should follow your heart the one you can be with the most the one u can tlive without thats the person who you need and want so just let time take its pace but speed it up ok...luv it
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crikey that's a predicament... If this is you're story then I pity you, if not then this is an imaginative write. Either way it's a good poem. xox
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my story
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awwww. hope it works it's self out for you. One of them is right for you, just wait and see which one it is.
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One for military huh? Gee I wonder who she is.. This was a great poem hun. I loved it..
Kitten~*<3
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Nicely done. Though the rhyme scheme goes ina nd out.
I agree with your theorys and you better let me know:
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