I am the being of ultimate love
but I am denied my true desire.
With HIS blessings from above,
human touch is what I require.
I protect the Earth
from valley to hill
through death and birth.
I wish for my dream to fulfill.
Given an emotion
but I have no heart.
What a silly notion
Am I but a piece of art?
Dear God, all knowing and wise,
grant my soul to heal
instead of a cold demise.
I want to know what's real.
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Lady Altheia
In a list
A contest entry
- Second Chances, the Rounds That Never End (Invite only) [#3] by Lady-Pegasus.
900 points, ended July 21, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for your contest submission as well as for following the rules. Hmm, I thought I ahd commented on this one previously, but no matter, I am here now! a wonderful take on the picture to be certain! We all have doubts and it is amazing that the comfort sometimes seems to come from nowhere and yet....
Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. 
Hetohke'e 
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3 claps...9pts
The Poetic Bandits
~Lilac
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A beautiful piece full of vivid description. I really liked it and I understood it which was even better! Great job!
~M
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Introspective
I really like this. I like how you can read it and get a different perspective each time. That does not mean that the flow isnt great because it is or it is not easy to understand. For me it was just vague enough for someone to tie their own experience to it. i liked it alot. Sorry for the limited applause. I do not have the points to give it, BUT that does not mean it doesn't deserve it.
Brian
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A heartfelt write. Good flow, rhyme and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Best wishes in the contest.
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Oh I feel this one! It's a very emotional poem to me! I think you did a great job! Good luck in the contest!
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Commented on this before you entered it into this reading list.
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interestin, alot of thoughts thrown into this piece, filled with mystery. i liked it.
Good Write and God Bless
The Unrequited Writer
Ben B, -
Very interesting take on the picture. Some of the meter in the stazas are a bit off making the rhyme not always even up. All in all though this is a very nice piece. Good luck to you!
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Lady A, A very spiritual and yes inspirational piece you penned here for the title and the contest. We sometimes get that feeling that we are looked upon as objects instead of human beings. Very emotion filled. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in th contest. Love and God bless, Joyce
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I was confused by this somewhat, I sensed you were speaking as an Angel, you talk of God and human touch in the same breath. I could envision a conflict of emotions of an angel needing to be loved like the precious souls who are watched over by this heavenly being. These are beautiful images and you have expressed emotion well in this poem. Your rhyme also is very good.
Dennis :^)
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"I want to know what is real," has a heartfelt ring to it, and is quite sad but endearing in its flow of words , and questioning, "am I but a piece of art"?
beautiful piece, good luck.
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wow, how beautiful. and sad too, in a way. very well written, and filled with emotions. I simply love it =]
-Kaitlyn-
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Hmmm, I commented and it went away!! Anyway..Wonderful depiction of what it appears she may be feeling in the picture. I also agree that it has a prayer-like quality. It is very effective. Beautifully written. Good luck in the contest.
Jeannie -
touching write
hopefully your soul will be healed and love will flow freely, and you get to know whats real. It is hard to figure out at times.
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You got right on this one- good for you. Sometimes we get that muse working immediately when we see the contest challenge - as you did here. Liked the flow and the prayer like quality of this poem - certainly fits well into the theme of the contest anad what it asked for. Lots of luck...
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