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The mansion

He had been a thief all of his young life.
Orphaned as a child, abandoned.
Living on the streets with only his wit.
He never really knew why he left his small village.
Perhaps to find a mark rich and plump,
Something that would pay well enough to retire from.
So, after packing his meager belongings,
He found himself in the city of New Haven.

He found the irony of the cities name refreshing,
New Haven. A new beginning. A new life.
He spent a few days searching out the perfect mark,
Wandering the streets, asking questions in the pubs.
Thats how he found out about the mansion.
No one who had ever went in that mansion
had ever returned, everyone had said.
He didn't believe it for a moment, however.
Probably just some old hermit lived there,
who wanted to be left alone.
From the windows he could see items
of beauty and wealth beyond his imaginings.
This would be it, his retirement was close at hand.

A couple nights later, He crept in by wan candlelit.
The light from the candles small flame
making shadowy demons dance on the walls.
From down the hallway, he though he heard a sound...
much like the whimpering of a small dog, possibly.
Quietly, he makes his way to the room to see.
Shaking his head, he wonders if he was hearing things,
as there is nothing there to make such a noise.
He wanders about, filling his packs and pouches
with the vast riches of the room.
How come no one has ever robbed this place before?
He thinks to himself with a grin, more for me.

His heart almost stops dead
when he hears a voice behind him.

 

    "Greetings, my friend. Welcome to my manor."

 

He turns slowly, already trying to think of an excuse 

to give to the owner, of why he is here.

Candles are lit, close by, and flare to life,

illuminating the room in better light.

A young man sits at the table, 

holding a glass of wine in his hand.

A woman in a black dress lies lovingly across his lap.

 

    "My Lord, I...." His voice trails off as his eyes adjust.

 

No, the woman is not lying there lovingly in his lap.

The side of her throat has been ripped apart,

and her crimson essence spills over the young lords fine clothing.

A trail of blood escapes from the lips of the Lord,

and the liquid in the wine glass...

 

    "oh, dear god..." the thief gasps. 

 

A bass chuckle escapes the lips of the Lord.

 

    "God. You will find no god here, in my house. 

    My house that you dare intrude upon, interupting my dinner."

 

The young Lord stands to his feet gracelfully,

and the dead woman in the black dress drops ignobly to the floor.

 

    "Now, allow me to introduce myself. 

    I am Lord Audun Bathory, at your service."

 

With a sarcastic grin, he bowed low in a flourish.

The thief swore he saw fangs in the Lords mouth.

 

    "Lord Bathory, I am sorry, I did not mean..." he began.

 

Quicker then he thought was humanly possible,

Lord Audun had his hand around the thieves throat,

pinning him, squirming, against the wall.

 

    "My little thief, you did not mean to rob me blind?

     Oh, you patetic little slime are all the same.

    How many people have you stolen from?

    Do you think yourself a good thief?

    Allow me to show you a master thief,

    For a master I am, although I do not steal treasure,

    I steal lives. Welcome to the first nght of your death." 

 

(possibly to be conitnued... Let me know if you want me to write more into this storyline) 

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  • maralisa silver member
    January 31, 2008
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    wow fantastic write and well worth a gold trophy


  • Xx Luna xX
    January 10, 2008

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    Thank you for entering

    This is brilliant. Kept me the whole way!! Very well penned.
    Wonderful picture!


  • Jehdin tal Darasin
    July 20, 2007
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    Wicked! Very chilling and leaves you hanging. Very visual, great imagery!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    June 7, 2007

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    How did i mise this, i mean really, this is amazing, i almost read the other one before this one, now i am caught up i wanna see what happenes, keep it flowing


  • WarmHeartedGeisha
    June 6, 2007

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    Hey uncle, wow this is so cool! Kreepy, but very cool! I like how u wrote this, it was like I was seeing a movie is slow motion. I really liked it all but some of the lines in this, really caught my intrest:

    "oh, dear god..." the thief gasps.
    A bass chuckle escapes the lips of the Lord.
    "God. You will find no god here, in my house.
    My house that you dare intrude upon, interupting my dinner."
    The young Lord stands to his feet gracelfully,
    and the dead woman in the black dress drops ignobly to the floor.
    "Now, allow me to introduce myself.
    I am Lord Audun Bathory, at your service."
    With a sarcastic grin, he bowed low in a flourish.
    The thief swore he saw fangs in the Lords mouth.
    "Lord Bathory, I am sorry, I did not mean..." he began.
    Quicker then he thought was humanly possible,
    Lord Audun had his hand around the thieves throat,
    pinning him, squirming, against the wall.

    And I'm looking foward 2 a sequil 2 this peice. I think it would be great!

  • WintersDarkCherub
    June 6, 2007
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    I like this one hun


  • The Journey Begins
    June 5, 2007
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    do we want you to write more??? YES!!...this was amazing...dark and a tad exotic...i loved it


  • Riftkin gold member
    June 4, 2007

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    M'lord, please, continue with this story. It flows smoothly over ones senses as fine wine down a Lady's throat. I am sure there are a few who would fear such a death, and know one that has thought on it. The title is perfect and the story right now incomplete.

    a humble thief

  • Riftkin gold member
    June 4, 2007
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    The dress of black
    Of a midnight snack
    Willing she gave
    For her love to save
    Her blood he crave
    Now she must go to the grave
    She was his loving snack
    This lady dressed in black


    This is indeed a tale
    in its own M'lord.


  • The Journey Begins
    June 3, 2007
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    so...dead...very interesting, can't wait for what you'll turn out


    • Lord Merlynn
      June 3, 2007
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      I will be sure to tell you when it is up. I have a general story idea for this one, but Im fighting with writers block at the moment, so I dont want to screw it up right now by trying to write something. However, this one is going to be... a little... ummm, violent? to say the least. lol


  • FallingTwilight
    June 3, 2007

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    Wow, that's a very interesting picture.It reminds me of Interview With A Vampire. I hope to read the poem once it's up.

    • Lord Merlynn
      June 3, 2007
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      I will be sure to tell you when it is up. I have a general story idea for this one, but Im fighting with writers block at the moment, so I dont want to screw it up right now by trying to write something. However, this one is going to be... a little... ummm, violent? to say the least. lol

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