Haunting fills the days wake
within the folds of gold yet to be seen
mask by life's possibilities
I see before me colors of rose
white verses red with hues of gold
will they wither and die before the gentle offerings of time
left among the grounds soft dust
lay the petals of lost love
the lust of life
passion be still before my blind eyes
of the gate keepers secrets
I shall listen and hold
onto every gift
offerings one man may hold
was it his choice to accept a life of fail
or falter before a young woman's veil
In shadows her secret will lay in keep
hidden deep within a soul
unable to find its suitable key
Holding onto to dreams of gold
Author notes
For Durazi...
A contest entry
- EASIEST contest in the world!!!!! Everything & Nothing !!!!!! by ibsons hysops.
302 points, ended June 5, 2007, 99 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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perfect way to begin and to end... this piece has a timeless and universal quality - as though it speaks to everyone - from all walks of life...
beautiful wording, a wonderful lyrical flow
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ellipsist
Thank you my dear for this wonderful comment..and for reading me~
Many blessings to you..
~A~
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Beautiful! Enjoyed every word...
Blessings~
Az
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aslyn
Thank you so much ...smiles
Peace and many blessings
~A~
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Bravo!!
I've only read two of your poems so far, and I have loved them both. I admire the way you put poetic magic in your work. It's such a pleasure to read.
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Knight70
Thank you again..Your reviews are most flattering..smiles
Peace
~A~
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Tim
I think in a past life I must have been a singer..I know that in this life if I were to sing , I would be arrested for disturbing the peace..lol..
Thank you my friend for all the wonderful support..
ILY
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Wow,
You are a true lyrical artist, love the content, form, and flow sweet soul.
-sighs- Another masterpiece I can cleary see...thanks for sharing you, and your poetic ways. Peace, Much love, Timothy 
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RC
Her shadow is the keeper of her secrets..
The use of spell check would have prevented the confusion.
I wish I had created a new word..smiles..
I adore old verb-age..
I love the way it sounds and the way that most of it reads..
I really think with the right piece it really sets the tone for the whole write..
Thanks so much for your comments and applause..
Peace
~M~
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amazing missa. you and the poem.
--Anna
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I think you meant to say, "in 'secret' in the later lines, rather than in her serect. If not I need an explanation to the meaning of a new word. The piece as a whole has that winsome feeling of love to be lost or gained within some ethereal world that few may enter. There is youth exploding from this write and all that it entails. The format and context of your work does carry a fantasy backdrop like some old world knights in shining armor kind of episode and you the damsel to be rescued if that is possible. Isn't it amazing how we with all our sundry modern dress and 'stuff' still find the verbage of days gone by to communicate ideals more fascinating than our own times. Dreams of Gold holds that place for me and it is good to see you writing. RC
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take a bow
bravo poet...another masterpiece...andy
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Andy..
I thank you sir..smiles
You are much too kind
I believe you owe AP some poetry...?
Hugs..
Melissa
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i like
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ibsons
and I thank you..
smiles..
Peace
~M~
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Blown Away
This one will be added as a link to my page...
Every woman should read this; it offers those thoughts buried deep in the feminine so rarely expressed...and here they open like softest petals spreading before the sun's gold and red fingertips.
In awe, Sister Blue
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Such a nice place to visit...smiles
Peace and many blessings..
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Sister Blue
I thank you so very much for your beautiful words..smiles...
You honor me with adding this to your page..
Smiles
Peace and love
~M~
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