Part I
we were watching the moon and the stars,
the Sun and the sky,
the world spinning around in a chocolate box,
the lights in our eyes; as they shimmered and shone,
a myriad of pools in a paper cup,
sign posts on the highways of our mind,
endless illusions spread far and wide,
a universe of prose written on clouds,
the moon spinning around in a daisy chain,
a face so familiar; we had forgotten the name,
the stars in the hands of statues entwined,
we were watching people explode into a million lights,
and nature escaping the racing wind,
a rainbow of colours painted over the sky,
and the love that existed between the lines,
of a poem written on parchment of our lives,
we were watching the moon and the stars,
and the sun and the sky...
Part II
we were listening to dreams; spun out of the blue,
a feast of new visions; that touched a new chord,
of music still playing; after the orchestra went home,
a chorus of angels that were singing in colours,
heralding the changes of a new age dawning,
and a world filled with magic to open our eyes,
covered in shadows of a coming messiah,
that extolled the old virtues we once thought were dead,
we were hearing the words of an oracle of old,
a place of renewal beyond our wildest dreams,
and speaking in voices we never recognized,
in a language of movement spun out before our eyes,
each question we answered only open the doors,
to a wider horizon beyond our control,
as we reached for the stars between the love we embraced,
then covered our bodies in cloaks of silence,
we were listening to dreams spun out of the blue,
a time of renewal we forgot to recall,
a new age of insight we missed,
when we turned our heads away...
Author notes
"I swear in that moment, We were infinite"
A contest entry
- Infinite, 10,000 points. by InfiniteCaitlin.
12000 points, ended July 2, 2007, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poetic Statement and Critical Dogma by Judith Chandler.
300 points, ended April 5, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Midnight Sky Of Love. by Poetryintheblood.
525 points, ended May 15, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - One Easy Prompt, Prewrites--Contest by No Quarter.
400 points, ended July 31, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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hmm very beautiful, i like the first best, plus i think the first one meets the prompt better. thanks for enterinng and good luck
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Yes, this is relevant to the topic of the contest; it expressing the need for us to get beyond mundane reality. Poetry is a way to do that.
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yess, I do like it much better this way, but its a little hard on the eyes, If you could seperate into stanzas. I hate to be so picky, but this one is a gem, and Id hate to not get to place it because Of things like spacing, but to me its really important, but these words are amazing.
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wow, this was a great piece, And a definite feel of infinity, the one thing bringing it down is the centered font, and the fact you have no punctuation. If you could go through and change those things, maybe combine some lines togehter with commas, and end ideas with periods, this would have a lot better chance at a top spot,because I really really liek this one. Tell me when youve done that.
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Loved the Afterglow!
You words are a tapestry that will long be remembered and you have caught the essence of something that is really unexplainable and would be classified as a mystery of infinite proportions. A very good study that takes 'feeling' to a higher sense using language that is fitting. Very good entry! joy
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This was amazing.
Stunning.
I absolutely love the imagery and adjectives,
[My favorite,]
Great job -
"a face so familiar we had forgotten the name"
mmmm! very good!
good luck in
the contest!
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