Your voice floats in a whisper to my ear,
I wish I could follow it for eternity.
Lying in front of you,
Your arms encompassing me in a net of safety.
Never do I wish to leave,
But rather at your mercy, sleep.
I trust you with my life and body,
Knowing you will take nothing I wish to keep.
Though my heart is sure through and through,
My mind argues for reasons illogical.
Doubts slam my heart,
Throwing things out of order; unchronological.
You are promised to him left behind,
How can I be sure that you'll be here for me.
So though however much I love you,
Friends we can only be.
Promise me that I shall have a corner of your heart,
A place reserved for only I.
Where you will always remember me,
And love me until the day we die.
Look into my eyes,
And whisper your answer clear.
An "I Promise"
Is all I need to hear.
[Because I already promised you,
in my heart]
A contest entry
- lets do this by AngelDreamer.
433 points, ended June 24, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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wow
that was stunning
i read it like 10 times and its still just as powerful as when i first read it.
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this is a verry touching peace, good luck in the contest and thank so much for entering
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Your getting much better
I like how you hint rhyme, speak to the heart and another at the same time. Great word use and fantastic sceme. It's promising to see you come along so fast.
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Beautiful
Beautiful poem WU. I read through some of your poetry and can definitely see a wonderful progression--you get better with each write. Your concepts and phrases were always magical but your form and flow show amazing improvement. I hope you will write a lot of beautiful poetry. Charlynn
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Katie,
your talent floats far higher than your age- this is a beautiful write!
each line flows into the other so gracefully it reads as though so much work has gone into it - yet it seems like it just flowed from your heart.
I personally loved "Promise me that I shall have a corner of your heart,
A place reserved for only I.
Where you will always remember me,
And love me until the day we die.
Look into my eyes,
And whisper your answer clear.
An "I Promise"
Is all I need to hear.
[Because I already promised you,
in my heart]"
keep writing for its a way of opening up your heart and soul
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wow! katie this poem is definately one of your best.
It is beautifully written and has sincere thoughts.
wow again
-KP]
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aww thanks so much =]
~WU
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