I can't feel
I've lost all connection
With your reality
Why must you taunt,
Torment,
And Tease?
You're inside my world
And I can't get you out
Leave me be - Such an underexaggerated phrase
Why is it impossible to pry myself
From your lustful hands
You prey on me
With such untaimable desire
I can't get out
When such a strong force
Is pulling me in
Author notes
Thrilla N9nna 503
A contest entry
- Truth of Life contest Round ONE by xandercheerios.
450 points, ended June 17, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Wow, this is very... painful. Yah, I pretty much can't say much else. I like the taunt torment tease part, I almost want to see more alliteration throughout the poem, maybe just another usage with verbs like that. I wonder, though, how you would be able to continue to the next round with a theme from this poem. Oh well, maybe I'll get to see, good luck!
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