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- She Waited with Patience -

 

Across ends of Earth
she waited with Patience~

as Guides mentioned
and told of tales
over test the Universe gave
just to reach her.

From within~

His Love must be pure,
cleansed from Heart’s fountain
for ability to cross
mountains which moved,

water's bodily warnings
also trees that talked.

Spirit must be unspoiled
of greed for wealth beyond reason

with desire
tamed, lust controlled.

Cannot want fame with fortune

at expense of another
especially she who waited
for his arrival.

If he harbored
any ill intent to harm,
his Life

would be determined by Karma;

known to be merciless.

Obsessive-compulsive behaviors

frowned upon

as swift winds watched
for Light would be tainted

by mental distractions

and true meaning of Love insignificant.

For endless days into sleepless nights,

he wandered on path

with Perseverance
to be by her side.

Bruised, Spirit almost broken
by challenges endured

yet his Love never wavered.

          Heart bled from jabs inflicted,

          his hands covered the wounds.

Demons disguised as Goddesses
teased to attract in front of his windows,

all were ignored.

Onwards towards Temple doors,
feet followed hundreds of steps
into Infinity
before he could set eyes upon her gaze.

Seven Virtues offered him chalice,
he had to drink from
which held Truth serum
with essence from Higher Powers

to filter through his veins.

          Lies would seep from his pores-

Many before him
drank and became eternal fixtures
on Succubus walls
never to walk Earth again;
Seven Sins inflicted endlessly.

With this in Mind,
cold lips faced the Elementals~
drank from inscribed chalice;
eyes closed but opened to opportunities
as lips warmed-


          pressed against hers.




  

 

Author notes

Love is ever so kind
but
pure Love
should not be *rushed*...


Reference Links:
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  • sidewinder silver member
    December 19, 2007

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    sometimes with patience and caring love is worth the wait!


    Yes you have me smiling once again my friend!
    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill


  • SycioSueB
    December 18, 2007
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    ~Heavenly~

    That is BEAUTIFUL * Really touched home for me * I am speachless here *
    Thank U xoxo


  • Swan song gold member
    December 8, 2007

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    As I was reading this deer my feet grew wings and i flew away into your lovely lovely poem this was flat
    beautiful thank you dear for your talent

  • Virgoan
    November 11, 2007

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    Beautifully weave piece here! Awesome imagery as always. Like everything about this.

    Excellent!

    Thanks for sharing and keep writing fellow poet.

    Virgoan


  • LadyShiva
    November 11, 2007

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    The flow and imagery of this piece was just amazing! I could, see, feel, and taste the journey with him! This was just amazingly beautiful!! *sigh* Thank you for sharing your gift!!!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 22, 2007

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    Great write indeed

    Within the whispers listen for the devils hiss for
    actions speaks louder than words sometimes it takes a liftime to learn


  • Vernal Bloom
    September 1, 2007

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    Very Beautiful!!!

    Wow!!!! your poem is really touching. It is a very delicate poem adorned with flowery language and very pretty images.
    I really enjoyed reading your poem and thanks for sharing with us.
    Would you mind reading one of my poems http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3342726 (somehow it’s special for me) I would appreciate your comments.

    ~Vernal Bloom~


  • Damique
    July 21, 2007

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    OMG! I Just had to say that your page is just beautiful as well as your poetry! I love it soooo much! Please continue!


  • Kyn
    July 20, 2007

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    "Seven Virtues offered him chalice,
    he had to drink from
    which held Truth serum
    with essence from Higher Powers
    to filter through his veins.

    Lies would seep from his pores-"

    Beautiful! A poem within a poem!


  • AgeofAquarius
    June 26, 2007

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    wow

    So deep with feelings and depiction of the journey of life.

    Beautiful inspiration to stir the soul.


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    June 24, 2007
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    ohhhhhh this poem is just so precious.. pure beauty of your pen paintes so many breathtaking images within my mind. You are truely inspirational, perfection just oozes throughout this piece...

    I can truely see why you won gold and an HM with this piece.


  • Ethereal One gold member
    June 17, 2007

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    beautiful emotion

    You express such beautiful emotions in this poem. A man like this one is very hard to find, but I do hold onto hope. To have a love that is pure and unconditional is such a gift. I really like:

    "Spirit must be unspoiled
    of greed for wealth beyond reason
    with desire
    tamed, lust controlled."

    Congrats on the Gold, you certainly deserved it.

    Love & Hugs,
    Jeannette


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 12, 2007
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    Well deserving of the Gold DEsire....


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 12, 2007
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    Awesomeness, Des...awesomeness Love ya, girl


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    June 12, 2007

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    Another compelling piece of wisdom. It speaks beyond the heart and encompasses you. All I can say is this piece is very well deserving of the Gold it won, it is phenomenal. It inhales you and then leaves you feeling it's love.


  • soulfultia gold member
    June 3, 2007

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    This was so excellently penned! What a wonderful write and a wonderful message that followed in your authors notes ohhhh wise one! ha! Great work, I really enjoyed this piece and as usual your work speaks for itself, spectacular girl! Good luck in this contest and as always my pleasure ~Tia


  • StarEyes
    June 3, 2007

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    WOW!!!!!!! This is amazing!!!! And well, yeah, Sounds like me. Just waiting, and still waiting, till one magical day! But yeah.....
    Best of luck in this contest!

    and much love always

    Nettie


  • Bedroom Eyes
    June 3, 2007

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    Ya know Sweetie, you have a knack of making us all look like children when you put something of this caliber to paper. Once again, you've show incredible imagery, and have woven a tale that is flowing and magical. Brilliant write my dear!!


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 3, 2007

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    Des,
    My God, gf!
    No truer words were ever written! This SOOO reminds me of HIM!
    I love the way you always express yourself and the way you always touch something in my heart!
    Girl, you got it goin' on!
    Wish you love and joy forever and always!
    Hugs,
    Sandy


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 3, 2007

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    PERFECT IN EVERYWAY

    This is just wonderful! the flow, the words, the feelings...This is truly your best masterpiece...eyes closed but open to opportunities as lips warmed- pressed against hers...Thank you so very much for sharing this breath taking piece with us


  • penman gold member
    June 3, 2007

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    Excellent

    Oh my precious. What a masterpiece you've created. Very touching and a wonderful picture. Good luck in the contest.

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