Farewell to the Evergreen Land,
I will not come back again.
I will leave forever,
Here I will put my feet never.
There is no hand to hold me back,
Nobody will miss me here,
No Magpie will sing,
None will give me a ring.
So I will leave the Evergreen Land,
And go to a land, for me, which will be grand.
May be I will live in the Garden of Allah.
I might build a hut in the Thames Valley.
I can go to the land of maple leaf,
or, the land of the free.
From those distant shores I might sometimes remember,
about my imagery homeland.
But still I will not come back to the Evergreen Land.
I will become one of the Diaspora, who is scattered from motherland.
Author notes
Option 2(Sad poem)
Option 2 (Your feelings about your country)
Thames Valley of the UK
Garden of Allah: The nickname of a desert in North Africa.
“Imagery Homeland”: Salman Rushdie wrote an essay called “Imagery Homeland” which deals with expatriate writers.
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Seems as if you have two poems here, the first two stanzas as one, and the second two stanzas as another, due to the changes in rhythm and rhyme. The power in the idea of leaving is softened because of this. Still a good write, though is the word 'imaginary' homeland what you were striving for?...As usual, your author notes are a great resource of information to assist in understanding parts which may give the reader some trouble. You carried the idea of yearning to leave quite well overall. Peace, Rhonda
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This was interesting, but I have to say the rhyming was kind of forced....Thank you for entering.
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This was very interesting to read. Well-written Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. -
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Sadness leading to future nostalgia. This is really sad to read and I liked the last stanza most.
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ilove this
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Thank you for your valuable comment.
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This sounds very very melancholic.You've chosen a perfect title for your piece that drags the reader directly into the poem.I liked the following lines most-
"From those distant shores I might sometimes remember,
about my imagery homeland.
But still I will not come back to the Evergreen Land.
I will become one of the Diaspora, who is scattered from motherland."
Are you thinking of leaving Bangladesh, Sir?
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Thank you for your valuable comment.I am thinking to leave Bangladesh.I often think to leave this country.Even if I get a chance to leave Bangladesh today,I think I will leave.
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