These are long days
Where time yawns ahead
And weeks roll over us
In silent moans.
These are parched days
Where water is sleepy and drugged
And light dances on rivertops
In muted colour.
These are summer days
Where our love is fresh
And drunk on moonlight
From heady summer nights.
Author notes
Just finished a book; 'the summer Flecher Greel loved me'... it inspired me a little, and seeing as how I'm suposed to be doing revision now, I thought I might make something of this inefficient use of my time. Loving it. xox
Please tell me what you think
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great job
im going to read that book...love ur poem!
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You def. have a way with words I will say that much. The images that establish when I read your poems just are amazing
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Heya..I just stumbled across your author page and figured I would read a few of your poems..I liked reading this poem...it flowed smoothly and your words were strong and just wow! That is one powerful love that you wrote about in your poem! keep writting your talened!
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Stumble at your leisure. I appreciate any comments, and I'm likely to return the favour
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Great piece. I liked the personification of time on line 2. This was a great poem with good description.
Thanks for your comment
Pozo
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Very Good Poem
I liked this poem. It was very similar to the first poem of yours that I saw. I can see the idea and reasoning behind it. It tells of you and of your surrondings with good visual effects. Poems that relay to the reader the feel of the moment, to me, are good poetry. They don't have to be long and drawn out. Very good poem I think!
"Boo"
Question: Are you writing a book or reading a book?
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Thank you for your comment. I appreciate it greatly. I have just finished reading the book. I doubt I'll ever write. It would be cool to do that though.
Many of my poems are similar... it's just a style of writing that I've developed I suppose. Some of them are different though. I look forward to reading more of your poems, and hearing your opinins on my own. Cheers xox
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This is extremely well written. The descriptions were vivid. I think the book inspired you quite a bit! Well done. Thank you for sharing. It was a pleasure to read.
Jeannie
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Very nicely penned. Not quite what I expected from your blurb. You have used imagery to its utmost here. (And I am not saying that to be kind. It is true.) I can feel the doldrums of summer idling by.
Thank you for sharing. Well worth the read.
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Revision? What revision? *hides the books*
Ha, I'm so glad I wrote my last one yesterday!
I love the poem! Makes me wanna go out and read the book because of it! Great job!
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Intoxicating
I loved this and the way you wordedthings it made me feel sleep/happy
like I was noddding off in a pleasently sunny and shady park, this was a refreshing read from my office...I work in an office and I'm 16 go me!..lol sorry
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This is really good. I like the repetition of "These are [blank] days." Effective imagery. I like the lines about the water and rivertops, and the line about being drunk on moonlight.
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wow this is amazing! Your use of words is beautiful and I can feel the heat of lazy days radiating from the words! My favourite lines are
'When time yawns ahead' and
'And drunk on moonlight'
Beautiful work! xxx
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pretty
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