Some things are almost impossible,
And her eyes are just one of these,
Or two as the case may be
And smiles.
Tied to the mast in stormy sea
The song sent across the wave to punish me,
The wind moans underneath,
Beneath my tossing boat
As I expire I bequeath
My wayward heart,
And punish her for little things,
Like song,
Or mirth when the wind brightens
And rides along,
And blind my crew and bound,
They cannot hear her song,
Or my cries for freedom from my bonds;
That I could flee to her
Across the stormy sea,
The wild wind warning me,
The empty sea receiving me,
Those eyes that I perceived
Deceiving me,
As I sink,
And join their starry depths.
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Written August 5th, 2003
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wow this was very well done. i like the storm and the eyes!
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wow this is beautiful. mind you anything about the ocean is beautiful. imagery is amazing. and the flow? well the flow is like the water on a calm and sunny day, peacful and beautiful
super write! keep it up
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awesome write
oh wow this was no less thank amazing... an epic love poem very well done . thanks for sharing your words with me. -
A siren song... subtle - interesting, rewarding, better and better on each read.
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How wonderful and lovely this is. Great write and great emotion. a very beautiful poem and descriptive words. I really enjoyed reading this. thank you for sharing.
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Excellent
A beautiful poem and I adore any on the ocean.The poem captured great imagery and a tale of beauty.
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a true sailor song. why do i find the stanza "and punish her for little things.." so damn sexy? -
wanted to leave more flowers, but dey not working.
Just reading.
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This I like better than the last I read, the sensuality speaks volumes in this piece, and it 'sinks' in. It shows aspects of both sides and goes deeper than that.
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~sigh~
such a gentle, floaty poem. left me chasing each word with a smile.
Lisa x -
Brilliant, brilliant write
reflecting Venus
oh! the oceans of her eyes
spark songs of Heaven
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so you know I was here, I'll be back for more...
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true
Sweet Nymph and Open Sea, Kalypso. Awesome piece here. Awesome! True. True.
Keep Feelin' Fascination,
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Why do you pen things, that make me feel all wistful inside? I liked this very much. ~~~Val
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Do you know the story of Lorelei? now that would make a lovely poem though this one is equally so..
Barb
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I really like the concept of this... the sea, the woman, her eyes... how easy it would be to dive into her...and yet...
I stumbled in stanza 4... when you say "She would allow"... it threw me for some reason, broke the flow or something and seemed out of place, not exactly sure why... just my ear...
2nd to last line, "As I do sink alone" ... I think you could say "As I sink alone" and it sounds more powerful...
Well, that's my 2cents... spend as you wish :-)
Lovely poem, enjoyed
~ Wendy
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