"We could have been so good together
We could have lived this dance forever"
~George Michael~
You came into my life at a time when all hope was gone.
Love sparkled in your eyes. The dance of a life time was about to begin.
Just didn't know that it would end so abruptly.
How was I to know that you would go back to your wife and five children.
We danced the dance of unrequitted love. Will we ever be able to dance our dance again?
A Careless Whisper between two friends.
As our hands grazed each other, the looks we shared were only between you and I.
You helped me learned that no matter what happens in life, love is still there.
Friends could share moments in time. That we could dance without dancing at all.
Now that you are gone to start a family with your wife. Our dance had to end.
We danced the dance of unforbiddened love. Will we ever dance this dance again?
A Careless Whisper between two friends.
There was time when I thought age was a factor.
There was time when you came into my life and I couldn't handle what you had to offer.
You left the picture and time passed between us two.
I thought that I wouldn't see you again. My thoughts went to if I see you again, that I wouldn't let your age get in the way..
Then one day God made a way for us to see each other again. The dance, our dance seem not to change. If anything it grew stronger. (so I thought)
This time I lept at the chance to do it over again.
Then you told me you had outside obligations.
That you were so "deep" into your obligations
that you were "engaged".
We danced the dance of appreciation and dedication. Will we ever dance this dance again?
A Carless Whisper between two friends.
Yvonne J. Griffin
6/3/07
Author notes
Option # 5 - song title inspiration
Song: Careless Whisper
Body: Based on events in my life.
Unrequitted love - Shawn McKinnley
Unforbiddened love - Sean Dailey
Appreciation and Dedication - Vincent Hamilton
These are three men that hold a life time burning sensation with my soul...
Yvonne
A contest entry
- ◄Show Me What You Got!!► by Hebz.
425 points, ended June 8, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Those Green Thingys by ms-cuddles.
700 points, ended October 28, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ouch
Been here my friend. I say the best ones are someone elses, but sometimes that doesn't ease our hearts. You should listen to Brian McKnight's Dance the Last Dance. That makes me cry and I just love Careless Whisper too.Thanks for entering and good luck. Hugs~ Cuddles -
oh my...I liked how you incorporate the song to your poem...emotions were so real and very sincere... very captivating indeed!!!
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This is My Second Review ~
I guess I didn't press enter when I reviewed it
a bit ago....hmmmmm ~
As I said earlier....I LOVED the way you
incorporated George into this write ~
I love unusual Themes....you have
done that with this one ~
You were cautious not to push
the same thing (idea) into
the Readers face, by accenting it with
lyrics which we could relate ~
The ONLY thing I could critique....would
be the Presentation.....and since you have
the ability to center your writes, I would
go back and try to create the same length of
lines for a better flow.....as sometimes, a
staggering write can interrupt the flow
and cause the Reader to get side-tracked ~
Other than that....Great work!
Bear ~
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Great entry for this contest and I hope you do well in it. I suppose some of this is of the personal kind and it makes me want to play big brother watching over you. I know that would not help the situation, it is just a reaction to the spurning in the poem. I think that many men are looking for someone to bide time with as they are trying to 'patch' things up at home. This is because being a man, I know how much big babies we are and cannot be alone. Just a tirade on my part regarding how big bad boys like myself are just babies inside. You be well my sis. RC
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Absolutely wonderful how you blended the lyrics, and your own personal sharing....excellent dance!
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Just Love it..
Very wonderful what you did right here, very very lovely piece...
I appreciate that you shared some events of your life here in that poem..
Very good work..
Keep it up
GloriousGift
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