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Cocoon

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"The more things change, the more they stay the same"

 

another dead day
has risen from its sleep;
the caterpillar marches
along its dancing flower.

to what purpose?
his stride takes him-
same branch;
same leaf;

same dead day
that rises like a cocoon.

he emerges
in great wings,
flies to the same
dancing flower,
marching like a myth
to another dead day.

 


 

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  • suseann
    June 9, 2007
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    Great use of metaphore in describing purpose or a lack there of.I at times wonder too,if we have reasons anymore than ants on their short lived work of anthills made. Evoling happens sometimes unware. Just as the caterpillar grew wings of flight taking him to new horizons.This gives pause to ponder.


  • leo2
    June 5, 2007

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    I haven't been on in a while either but I do miss reading verse such as this. At times it does seem like the cycles of life have no purpose but then I think of the alternative. Best of luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

  • Just4u
    June 4, 2007

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    Being stuck in a rut is never fun, but we all tend to have those day. We've just a reoccuring rain pattern going on here. They say tomorrow will be sunny then more rain to follow so I think I'll grab the camera and make hay while the sun shines...

    a thousand miles
    things look so damn familiar
    with only...left turns

    Hugs...Eddy

  • luvdrkchocolate
    June 3, 2007

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    Wow. This is kind of crazy poem. Not that it's bad or anything but that it just seems kind of crazy. lol I guess it was because you kept saying dead day and it seemed so contrary to the life cycles that you were protraying. So to me it kind of sounded like you were saying that you're feeling a little hopeless right now or like life doesn't seem to hold any meaning for you and you feel like you don't know what to do with yourself. Lestways, that's how I interperted it. I thought you did a good job with this.


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 3, 2007

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    The infinite cycle of life with all its colours, its births and deaths...the only constant thing in life is change. Such a haunting poem this is...so beautiful in its gentle sadness...soft and resigned like a sigh. Liked the way the words "a dead day" seem to hug this poem...death, and inbetween life and flight. Somehow we always return to the same things... So great to see you on a poetic roll again...write on, poet!!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    June 3, 2007
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    Thanks. I've been quiet for so long. I can't seem to shut up this weekend.


  • Rowan gold member
    June 3, 2007

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    Ah, yes the redundancy..we do often think what's the point of it all? Why do things do what they do, seemingly to no end. But it's not what we do, it's how we write what we see. This had a resigned feel to it,
    a haunted sadness. I really liked this one.
    Again, it's nice to see your work here again.

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