On different sides of the USA
me in New York, her in L.A.
This can't be happening to us, to me
"We'll work something out" I plea!
I'm beside myself
while her crushing rant
rains down on my laid-bare heart.
"Do you not know
the depths of my love?" I start...
I am staggered
by the ferocity of her onslaught,
Then I spy my true love Sigh...
She's crying, sorry that we fought.
"But it'll never come to past,
this long distance love
will never last, will it?"
She asks.
By now
I'm also crying,
denying,
lying to myself,
by my lonesome self.
Knowing this,
the things I foresee,
feeling these truths
brings me to my knees.
"I am not worthy
of such devotion,
such emotion.
I swore I'd never hurt you"
I tearfully whine ~
Her head tilts toward mine ~
At that very moment
our eyes lock lovingly,
souls touch, hearts advance.
I now feel depleted, defeated,
unseated by circumstance.
A scream from within
lets loose
from my tortured soul,
and what burst forth
is a sorrowful groan.
Now maimed,
I refrain
from further futility,
humility, and pain.
I instead with raised head
said "you I'll never offend"
and preceeded to
send her a kiss
on the wind...
to begin or to end? ~
In a list
A contest entry
- Lost love and getting it back by useles.
900 points, ended November 12, 2007, 11 entries
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Long distance love, *sigh*. It's so romantic, until it actually happens to you. Lovely.
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aww how sad, i have been through that before
well written.
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this was wonderful.
definitly a nice write.
great job.
Best of luck to you
and thanks so much for entering.
|aiko| -
I liked this...there is a heartfelt sincerity here - a poem written from the heart, without pretense...so many people write just for the sake of poetry, but your voice here is so very authentic and real. I loved these lines as it speaks of a humble surrender:
"I'm now defeated, depleted,
Toppled by tears."
Of course the last stanza just makes itself sit in my eyes too..."so maimed and refrained". Love always maime but where there's real love, it always heals too - if only we reach out and open our arms. Such a gentle poem this is, Nicholas.
~ Nicolette
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I love this, especially the last stanza, you have written well what relationships can entail here!
The feel of the poem makes the reader feel the emotions of the characters easily
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