This is me.
Each and every imperfection you see.
This scar I got at 8,
Fell off my bike,
I was so proud of that scrape,
This is me.
My curves,
You needn't like them,
But they make me who I am,
My donald duck laugh,
And the bow in my lip,
This is me.
My pidgen toed walk,
The dimples above my bum,
I got both from my mom,
This is me.
The freckle below my left eye,
I've had as long as I've been alive,
This is me.
I am all these things,
But so much more.
I am the fire that lights my soul,
The music that makes me dance in the falling rain,
I am the smile that spreads across the room,
And my own impossible dreams,
This is me.
Whether you take me,
Or leave,
Love me,
Or deceive me,
This is me.
Author notes
just know that this turned into my own personal declaration of self, all input on structure is apriciated, as well as constructive criticism. And to the contest maker, thanks.. this helped me open myself to who i was and just yell it to the world.
A contest entry
- lets do this by AngelDreamer.
433 points, ended June 24, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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great job i expesholy like the part
And my own impossible dreams,
This is me.
Whether you take me,
Or leave,
Love me,
Or deceive me,
This is me.
great wright and good luck in my contest -
I like where you keep this simple and concrete, and save the abstract things till the end, yet still keep them grounded in images that connect the reader.
There ae some cliches, but I do not think they spoil your poem in any way.
Line 4 small typo- 'of' should be 'off'. I on mention because you say in your notes and you evidently care for best presentation. Many here do not. I think the small detail of 'you' you pick to tell us says that you like attention to such things. This is more what the poem shows, rather than the words tell, which is why I take time to say I like it and good luck.
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this is great!!! i loved it!!! great definition of yourself i like it alot!
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