Brown shimmering eyes of curls,
Must the gleam be love that looks to me
Or “tis the nature of what is so beautiful of him?
How do I speak in relaxed causality?
when his eyes fights this flimsy heart inside,
I submit in millions of smiles and blushes
Only conversating to him would mean
having to impede the beats of my breathe
His stunning eyes with such culpable glow
combined by the sun, moon and stars
Could leave me to faint upon the air
tis what is now of only exaggeration
but my body is too fixed upon love’s astounding ness
Could screen all my reasons and answers of questions
Questions that seem with one gaze takes
all of this world’s beam within me
recieving it, combining them all to throb
the gravity of the wind beneath my heart
casing the lips of my heart to choke
in saccharine love’s sensations
His magical eyes...
Author notes
option 8
A contest entry
- A ...=...Anything by TheAshtrayGirl.
550 points, ended March 13, 2008, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I liked this very much.thanks for sharing this.i liked this very much. thanks for entering my contest and best of luck. well written and a wonderful read. thanks again for entering. i hope to read more from you soon.
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wow really good! great imagery! I really enjoyed this piece! Thank you so much for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
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Great job. I love the imagery in this. You are clearly quite an exquisite poet. Great job and good luck in the contest.
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His stunning eyes with such culpable glow
combined by the sun, moon and stars
Could leave me to faint upon the air
I ain't gone lie those are my lines too. I love that part. Gurrl you gettin it. I see you this is HELLA good,
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His stunning eyes with such culpable glow
combined by the sun, moon and stars
Could leave me to faint upon the air
Those are the hardest lines I ever read to describe the gleam in someone's eyes. I loved this poem, I might as well start bookmarking all your latest entries
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Very Good
Questions that seem with one gaze takes
all of this world’s beam within me
recieving it, combining them all to throb
the gravity of the wind beneath my heart
casing the lips of my heart to choke
in saccharine love’s sensations
Just beautiful as read aloud
Rick
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Sacharine, that's my world, you stole my word. This is a beautiful piece of work. Just when I think I can compete with you, you blow pass me and leave me stun in awe. I love your work, your voice and everything about you. I cannot tell you how much I admire your magnificence. Keep up the great work as always. Be bless the heart that smiles faithfully.
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