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~Mirror~



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Will you catch me if I fall?



Staring at the nearly invisible being,
a richly brown barrier betwixt us.
In my mind I couldn't even allow.
I needed help yet couldn't avow.

Granting my mind the freedom of speech,
notwithstanding the feel of gravitating.
But being at such a distance in hight,
she seemed to scream the same plight.

How could I have forgotten my location?
Burly green trees called from the back,
branches reaching over a blue lagoon.
I stared into a reflector that bright June.



Can you catch me if I fall?


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PICTURE INSPIRATION: a girl sitting on a thin branch between bright green leaves mumbling "Will you catch me if i fall?"
TITLE INSPIRATION: Mirror

A contest entry

We expect so much from our loved ones... but are they really capable and reachable 24/7? are they to blame if you/I fall?

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  • AngelDreamer
    June 9, 2007
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    this is a great message, but some how the way it was written didnt toutch me as much as it could i really do like this part though
    "Granting my mind the freedom of speech,
    notwithstanding the feel of gravitating.
    But being at such a distance in hight,
    she seemed to scream the same plight"

    you did a great job and good luck in my contest


  • pickers silver member
    June 2, 2007

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    You get applause just for using the word 'betwixt'!! Awesome! I think this is a great interpretation of the picture and and the title. No one is capable and reachable 24/7, but it helps to have enough people so that most of the time they can fill in all the gaps between them! Do you need other people 24/7 anyway? Sorry, this comment has turned into a philosophical discussion with myself! Nice poem, well done.