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Sleeping In Black Rain

Filling the vacancy of my mind
Binding my thoughts and bending time
The desire of what i'd like to do
Before my life is bid Adieu

Simple, Yet not really sane
I wish to sleep out in the rain

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Op4 SIV

Aside from all the material things i want before i die, and things i would like to accomplish i just love this idea.

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  • Romily
    December 25, 2007

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    Short Poem with a Very deep meaning. Actually I prefer Short Poem. I liked your job. Very cute poem.


  • Sinfully Yours
    July 11, 2007

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    ha ha! this is pretty funny! it is very simple and not really sane, but its still really good nonetheless! great job and good luck!


  • Silence of Finality
    June 20, 2007

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    Simple

    Well, it shouldn't be too difficult to accomplish this goal. I must say though, the piece is moving and I am highly impressed. I love your work.


  • erininthesky
    June 4, 2007

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    This is amazing... your use of words and imagery is great, and good luck in your contest babe! ♥ Erin