Hippy dance

My friend was doing a silly dance
I asked what it was called
he said it was a hippy dance
but he was shiny bald

He taught me how it's done
and sung a little song
I thought it was a stupid dance
and he just went, gong

It's so stupid that's why it's fun
why can't you just see that
you just have your little fun
and do this dance in combat

Author notes

12 years old

A contest entry

Ages 13 and Under Only ~ Pick a Title and Roll With it 2 by Amunet Wolfbane. 450 points, ended June 14, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Celticmoon
June 12, 2007

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This is very cute and it made me laugh too. You have written a very clever poem here. I think many people are going to be laughing when they read this Well Done!

Blessings
celticmoon
B Chandler
June 10, 2007
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Very creative; score: 95
RIP Whoever
June 6, 2007

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~AWESOME~
he was shiny and bald????????????????????????????????

hahahaha. you're funny~
rock on cause that's what you're doing.
weird.... can i keep talking?
you're getting better. much better.
love the rhyme... that's something i haven't seen in a long time.
oh and i HAVE to say it.
"i can relate. this is some kind of special metaphor~"
HAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHA~~~
XXbLAcKNAiLPoLisHXx
June 3, 2007

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lol!!! hahahahah!!! i really loved the part
he said it was a hippy dance
but he was shiny bald
cuz hippies are supposed to be bushy haired...right? or something like that don't really know ...but i know it's a funny and wonderful poem that i liked so much!!