"If you're not living on the edge you're taking up too much space."
the world is round for a reason,
so we never have to walk I straight lines
there’s always a corner to be turned,
and to take it wide, gives you a bigger view
the heart beat in your throat can only be achieved,
if you’re balancing on the brink of sanity and ambition
you can’t stay stagnant in a common sense,
when adrenalin can promise you grandeur
the heart of the globe makes no sparks,
and the Technicolor reel can only be achieved on boundary
we don’t need torpid specks slowing the Catherine Wheel down,
we need to keep the rotation going with vigour and energy
you could ricochet of the rim of your border,
but things are more beautiful when they are in orbit.
Author notes
4) Quote Inspiration
e) "If you're not living on the edge you're taking up too much space."
Wonderful contest
A contest entry
- Battle Of The Muse. Fighting With Ink: {ROUND ONE} by PerfectImperfection.
900 points, ended June 20, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent write, there is a lot of good lines here, the last two in particular were my favorite which closed up the poem strongly.
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A spectacular poem. It's filled with powerful, though-provoking feelings.
A few small things though - 'walk IN straight lines', 'richochet OFF the rim.'
I also thought that repeating the word 'achieved' is such a short space of time wasn't so effective. But I'm definitely loving this piece. It has a certain spark to it, especially the line "balancing on the brink of sanity" - great flow & alliteration.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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Thank you for a well thought out and helpful comment!
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wow
this was magnificent, my one request is will you take my hand and allow me to travel with you for i do live fully and enjoy that moment when time freezes adn we know we may not have tomorrow.
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Very intriguing thoughts to provoke the mind. A conscious stream of truths to be had. Thank you so much for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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Thank you my beauitful
All my love and hugs
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i logged u as 1 of my favorites, i hope u don't mind...
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the heart of the globe makes no sparks
and the technicolor reel can only be achieved
on boundary...
the essence of your thoughts simply amazes me. ^that
...was my favorite stanza! fresh thinking is what i love the upmost about "Catherine Wheel"!!!
a genuine original. quote made by c.w.? fictional?
intriguing.
fits perfectly w/the muse~battle~theme.
take it easy,
ibsons -
Beauty At Its Finest
This is one oif the finest awesome poems I have read of yours sweetay and I always loved your poetry too. any ways this is just an awesome poem and its awesome how you entered the contest but the way you mixed the options in this poem is awesome. keep up the very good work Paul
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wowowowowwow.
beautiful.
powerful message.
very deep.
I'm at a loss for words.
but I LOVE YOU!
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