Yesterday was bliss
Our love was boundless
We were in heaven
Because we were together
Our hands together
The sun shining
Everything was going our way
Then life got better
When you turned round
Looked me in the eyes
And said 'I love you'
What can I say?
I was overwhelmed
But I was happier than ever
Who could blame me
For holding her close
And whispering in her ear
'I love you'
We will hold on to yesterday
As a day of true love and happiness
For it was on that day
That we proclaimed our love
A contest entry
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1000 points, ended June 6, 2007, 22 entries
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Comments
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simple but loverly, very sweet poem about being in love.
thank you very much for your entry and best of luck
lucy
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Adorable. A bit simple, though. Thanks for your entry & good luck in my contest
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Nice
A nice love story and poetic entry into the contest. Goodluck.
Jim -
luck
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wow.. I love this, it's so beautiful in it's simplicity... great write good luck in the contest
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Good choice of title. Nice first two stanzas. Third stanza, you leave the 'you, I, our, me, we' of the previous stanzas, and change to 'her'. It might flow better to go back to the 'you, your', as if you were discussing the memory with your sweetheart.
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Awww this is such a beautiful memory to share in poetic form! Just beautiful and so touching to my heart!
I hope you keep that memory for years to come
I wish you all the best in the contest!
Jasminersose
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Sweet
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hold on to it forever
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Hold on tightly to yesteryears, for they pass so quickly. Title wonderfully captured...good luck in the contest
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reminds me of some memories of my own thought they
were real but were just lies still i wish to creat
other true lovely ones again when I fall in love
this's really really lovely,romantic,whenever u find
true love just hold on to it n keep z lovely
memories,real lovely writing,touched me a lot -
the last para is spendid. it sums up very well the reason for holding on to yesterday. goods luck in contest.
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touching sentimen
you described this loving moment heartfelt and precious as it was good write
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Beautiful
A lovely poem of true love. Just a pleasure to read and enjoy. Best of luck in this contest. ~Pamela
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Once more I find another young poet entering my contest Always a joy for me
I like the simplicity of this piece, words written with meaning and not glossed over with storybook lines Well done Thank you for entering good luck in the contest
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Warm
I well penned account of your feelings which came through with warmth and affection
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I Love the message here!
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