Carressing the soft gentle skin
Burning in my veins like liquid sin
Wishing I could be, what I have not been
Crying out to quietly to be heard over the din
Sweat on the brow
Muscles strain and my body bows
My judgement clouds
My mistress of lust, soon makes the same sounds
Purring in her ear so sweet
Preying on her body, my treat
Kisses on her stomach's seat
Making a line down to where her hip bones meet
Her breathing grows deep
Her moans escalate in one single sweep
Back up her smooth skin, my fingers creep
Inside my chest, my heart leaps
Beside my porcelain angel
I shall lay
Until death comes
and takes my breath away.
And when I go, fair angel, do not weep
Just remember our passion, our secrets
do keep.
Please tell me what you think
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wow this is very visual and strong, beautiful work i could really see this and feel the passion. i love it veryu nice work you have a great talent with words. this flowed nicely
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wow
very erotic and sexual. Also very beautiful, this is very well written, its an amazing write!
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ok this piece started to get my excitement levels up. a very passionate write and it really puts the feelings of the subjects out there. weel done. fantastic piece.
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thats was fantastic my dear. you can taste the passion and the great love behind this sweetly sultry peace^^ its exceedingly well written, you should be proud^^.
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good job
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ha ha WOW that is great I loved the feeling and the passion u can feel it great job
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awsome
that was great. I loved it.
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Oooh wow! This piece got me thinking really Bad so you obviously hit my nerves. Love your work! Very sensual & romantic.
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wow nice one i love it keep on writing
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Holy wow!!
"Burning in my veins like liquid sin" That was perhaps the most beautiful line I have ever seen.. This was amazing and the imagry was stunning.. I am amazed how you where able to use words to mask the intimancy of the entire work and at the same time me as the reader understood what was going on..
Beautifully written.. I loved it..
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wow
i really like this poem. good job. i love your choce of words. really good.
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*orgasm*... This totally reminds me of me and my girlfriend.
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