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Can’t Break A Heart If Its Not Beating

Death is the most beautiful thing of this earth
For without death there can be no birth
If it was given to me by my lover
I would always choose him there’d be no other

And now I’m laying here all asphyxiated
Tearing apart the form that god created
I can barely understand this affliction
But I don’t want to stop my growing friction

You can’t break a heart if its not beating
I’ve felt heartbreak and I’m not repeating
Can you make yourself the death of me
Just say that you can and I will agree
You can’t break a heart if its not beating
For with death and love there is no meeting

In this body I am forced to be restricted
When you’re vulnerable to love you get addicted
So I pray to you every day and night
To release my and soul and release my delight

The flesh some say they love can’t take elation
Like this there is no love just fixation
So let go of all your fears and set me free
I want these words to be my final plea

You can’t break a heart if its not beating
I’ve felt heartbreak and I’m not repeating
Can you make yourself the death of me
Just say that you can and I will agree
You can’t break a heart if its not beating
For with death and love there is no meeting

Squeeze the life out of this frail form
If you let me escape when I transform
We can be free for eternity together
For the beauty of death is that it is forever

You can’t break a heart if its not beating
I’ve felt heartbreak and I’m not repeating
Can you make yourself the death of me
Just say that you can and I will agree
You can’t break a heart if its not beating
For with death and love there is no meeting

Author notes

well behaved women rarely make history

brokenheart.Lady Nightshade

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 17, 2007
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    Thank you for your powerfully profound entry, Josephine


  • xxlisajazminexx
    October 8, 2007

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    WONDERFULLY AND BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN PIECE YOU HAVE HERE.......................

    ITS TRUE YOU CANT BREAK WHAT YOU DONT HAVE BUT BY NOT ALLOWING THE PAIN YOU DONT ALLOW THE LOVE EITHER......
    ITS A CATCH 22............
    GREAT WRITE!!!!!
    ITS LIKE A SONG... LOVELY....
    YOU ARE MOST DEFINATELY IN MY FINALIST LIST NOW!!!!!
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    THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ENTERING THIS WONDERFUL PIECE INTO MY CONTEST!!!!!!!-----
    WISHING YOU MUCH LOVE----
    AND GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    XxLisaJazminexX

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  • Ithica silver member
    October 8, 2007

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    Dark, powerful and filled with profound sadness. It has a very haunting quality to it. I really like how the title echos all the way through your poem with such fragile sentiment... Ithica

  • emotion-explosion
    August 30, 2007

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    this is really powerful and sad. Great lyrics. also i love the title. it grabs the attention of the reader right away! good luck


  • silencethequestion
    July 3, 2007
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    very sad. i like this a lot. i also like the form of this write. thanks for entering


  • xlilliexdiesx
    June 28, 2007
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    thanks for the entry good luck


  • The-Phoenix
    June 13, 2007

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    This could be a song. I can imagine this being sang by some basey rock band. It is darkly beautiful and deep. I really enjoyed reading this. Great job!
    Thank you for entering!
    ~Phoenix


  • Bedroom Eyes
    June 9, 2007

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    Wow...there is a dark depth to this piece. It's like a sonnet, but also lyrical in it's form. I love it that there is such a diversity in the styles of the different poems in this contest. I can see I chose correctly when I asked for anything to be entered.

    Poignant and powerful piece. Well done Poet. I would ask you to please enter your screen/pen name in your author's notes though please.

    Good luck in the contest!


  • Dreams27
    June 8, 2007

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    a great write here...good use of love and death...i enjoyed reading! thanks for entering and good luck in the contests!! take care, Sam (Dreams27) xx


  • xandercheerios
    June 6, 2007

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    Hey, I can't seem to find your username in the authors notes... so before I read the poem, either point it out, or add it, if you want the poem to be considered for judging.


  • crystallynnbradford
    June 5, 2007

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    wow! loving the rhyme scheme and I really liked how you intertwined love with death. thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • ibsons hysops
    June 4, 2007
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    found this to be quite good actually


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    Wow! How dark this is! I've been in this place so many times...more times than I care to count so I can fully relate.
    Deeply poignant
    All the best in the contest!

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