I beg of him to hear my call
Before I fall
Out of his sight
Into the night
If he will hear my sighing plea
Come rescue me
From darkest night
And stem my flight
I loyal will be for all life
I'll be his wife
My love is his
As my life is
A contest entry
- Weekend Quickie Contest by CitrineSunrise.
600 points, ended June 4, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - You Better Hurry! by Shakari.
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This piece is beautiful, flows well, and has a nice bit of rhyming. I enjoyed the romantic and hopeful emotions that emanated from your words and am pondering adding this piece as a finalist. It is of much talent, but I have so many entries. Keep up the great work, thanks for your entry, good luck in the contest, and thanks for sharing!
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This is a very poignant minute poem. It had a nice flow and the meter was perfect. I hope he hears your plea. Thank you for entering this contest.
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Heck, this could be a song. all the lines after the first have this "burst" effect to them, like your pleading. Very neat. Well done.
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