june came
with too much heat
and no hope
just time to kill
no purpose
no point
to any of it
defeated
i lie languid
covered
in tears
and sweat
waiting
for the end
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Wow.. this is really sad. I can relate - I remember summers when my boyfriend was away, and i would just lie on the bed, think of him, and wait. It seemed to go on and on, just like you wrote.
You did a great job of describing that kind of anguish. Great write!
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good write!
I absolutely love the imagery that you included, physical, emotional, and spiritual. I love using my mind's eye, and your words proved to me that it was well worth it.
Emotions are my angels as well as my demons. I am an extreme emotional, empathetic person. This is why I love poetry so.
You touched my emotional boundaries, which is great! Not many people can. All I can say is Kudos!!!!!
Great Write!!!!
Cith
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Very nice poem, with very few words. I usually don't like poems that don't explain themselves fully... But, this one is ok, and it is good for the words that it does have. You use the words very good.
I don't know about the title tho.
Very nice though,
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This is a good piece. It is very sad. I like the use of the word "languid". You don't read that word used to often. Well done.
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Yeah it's a good word.
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I like it.
I like all your work.
You are by far my favorite poet on the site.
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