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My Soul

Unzip my skin...

there is nothing,

only

a hollow carcass mass, 
drowning

within bleeding dreams.

 

A recluse to societies eye...


My soul is caged

within the walls

of the minds conscience.


A failure within the spirals of life. 

Author notes

3. Poet's Challenge: 55 syllables

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  • DancingRed
    June 19, 2007

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    This is a lovely powerful piece. The shortness really suits, and adds to the overall powerful feeling.
    I think 'society's eye' is want you meant to say.
    Thanks for entering.
    DancingRed.


  • ellipsist
    June 17, 2007

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    pretty damn good

    the last line of the first stanza and the very last line of the poem are my absolute favorites!

    brilliant!


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 9, 2007

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    Very nice! 55 syllables exactly, and with something to say! Well composed piece of sadness, a life of tragedy. Thank you so much for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!