I'm falling deeply within the radiant white sheets
of this bed called love
Tucked in by your soul as it consumes me
like a thick warm blanket
I'm comfortably in love with you
falling asleep within our bed
as my dreams become yours too!
I'm at peace, your love helps me resist temptation
I'm at ease, your love brings to me serene relaxation
I sink endlessly in this pure thickness
falling deep beyond love's bed springs
blissfully, drifting into love's lushious cushions
I'm past personality
past the subject of sensuality
premarital sex would only defile the purity
and ruin the essence of our love tainted sheets
so I sink into depths of a pure love sea
true love is only deep
when God is the foundation
For love harbors no dark forms of deciet
pure love, is only pure without presence of manipulation
for love cannot hate, and hate cannot love
thus I am comfortable in this rapturous gift from above
Comfortable for I am Love's child,
embraced and consumed with Love's love for me
True love is He, the most High who resides in heights so heavenly
and also within the heart of me.
Within the heart of you
my wife
To love we give our gratitude for our union of Forever
happily ever after, for true love is only deep
when you're locked within the gates of marital bliss
and you've thrown away the key
to forever love
unconditionally.
A contest entry
- Round One of Five by Kei-Aira.
450 points, ended February 5, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow this is a great poem and I loved it great write
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Well done my fellow poet. You did a great job with this piece. Very descriptive and full of emotions. Thank you for sharing this with me and best wishes. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
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Wow!
This was beautiful!
I loved it!
there is so much passion put into this poem, man I had to read it twice!! You write so beautifully every word goes together.... Did you write this for someone, or did u write this because u r married... or what inspired u to write this, I loved it -
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I'm not married, and it was more a of an eperimentation. I was adopting the writing style of one my friends, and mixed it with mine, and I gave birth to this poem. but thanks for the comment.. I really appreciate it.
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excellent
very beautiful blak, hey check out my new poems the first three are new and tell me what you think!!
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Hey babe!!!!! This was sooooo good!!! Very sexy and thoughtful....just good!! lol! How've you been? I miss talking to you! Again great peom and see you later!!!
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this write reminds me of a female artist on here sounds like her to the complete te . babe you really did a great job on this write realist 07 suggested i read this you have a great pen for passion ~ jewels ~
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alllllll SHit damn this is good shit i cant even type lol nice flow damn nice pleasure very well written Flawless
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Omg! this one is written so beautifully and the words the vocabulary is so decent and attractive. I love the choice of words and the amazing flow which makes it more pleasant to read. I just love the imagery and the emotions mingled with it..
Its a perfect one and beautifully written.
I love this one, great job!!!
I hope u like mine too, take a look..
thanks, God bless
love,
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oh such a beautiful love poem indeedy. Makes me want to toss caution to the wind again and let myself fall in love. Course i am timid about getting married again. once was enough for me unless the right person comes along and sways me to change my mind. very well done.
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I worte this poem so long ago I'm surprised that people are still commenting on it.
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This is so breath takingly beautiful! You wrote it so well and made me believe in love. I really like the lines:
Tucked in by your soul as it consumes me
like a thick warm blanket
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This is astounding. How could anyone not enjoy reading this? I was so sad when it ended because this type of thing seems to be like a good very good dream. Your words were so drugging, and gave the effect of a high whilst reading them. Your talk of true love made me want to have what you have. It was so sugary that I didnt want it to end, I wanted it to go on and on and on. It was a very lovely read, and is a poem very well written you must be an amazing poet to produce something of this caliber. Well done.
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loved the comparison
this was amazing, i enjoyed every second of reading it, so much i read it again
to have that kind of love and lustless passion between you and someone else is like heaven, i havent even felt that, im somewhate jealous haha, but in all honesty this was great, couldnt get any better, keep on writing and congratulations with finding that love that no one can ever seem to obtain
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This was a wonderful poem that carried such an innocent quality within the lines, yet a deep love that is difficult to formulate into words, however, you have pulled it off quite well
This was a pleasure to read and I look forward to checking more of your work out soon ~Tia
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wow this poemwas beautiful and deep. I love how its soulful with your rhymes. I can't lie but i really like this poem.
I'm at peace, your love helps me resist temptation
I'm at ease, your love brings to me serene relaxation
I sink endlessly in this pure thickness
falling deep beyond love's bed springs
blissfully, drifting into love's lushious cushions
I'm past personality
past the subject of sensuality
premarital sex would only defile the purity
and ruin the essence of our love tainted sheets
so I sink into depths of a pure love sea
keep flowing
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i liked this one it was good ...i just didnt know what poem you wanted me to read i read that crusifiction one how ever you spell it...but i ldid enjoy the visual you brought the poem to life enough for me to understand this time..lol
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That's hard blak. I think you might need to slow your roll cause you ain't met that chick yet.
premarital sex would only defile the purity
and ruin the essence of our love tainted sheets
so I sink into depths of a pure love sea
I might as well copy and paste the whole poem in the comment cause I loved every line
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Very nice, Dre.
I like it ALOT, lots of emotions =]
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