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A Map to Eternity

Innocent eyes they looked into mine

Asking if I knew the way to salvation

Wandering aimlessly each one unknowing

Seeking a leader, seeking a grounding

"Are you the one?" They would ask

And I shook my head accordingly

 

Each one blundering through an aimless life

Which job? Which partner? Which religion please?

Choices all around for them to decide

And still they cannot see

And still they do not know

Innocent eyes gaze to me and tears fill them

"Do you know the way?" They ask.

 

Lost sheep, abandoned by their shepherd

Crowding in their places of worship just hoping

They want to be saved but they don't know what from

And they want to be enraptured but wait for it to come

I could tell them many things

But to watch them is far more amusing

 

I do know what they want to be saved from

I held it in my hands and it burned my immortality

I know how to save them yes

But no one would listen to my words so quiet I remain

And from preaching I refrain

And watch them seeking that which I hold

Smiling because I really could have told

 

A dark night descends round Cathedral walls

And I hold it in my hands, its beauty effervescent

I lay it down for another to find

Buried it is and a treasure map hidden

One day the seekers of salvation will search again

And one day someone will find it

Will they reveal it or will they hide it?

 

Each person who found it took a little of it

And placed something of their own inside it

As I have taken from it also

And placed within it something of my own

It goes by many names and faces

But only one part is found at a time

Put each peice together and you'll see

What was meant in this place and time

 

The clues are found in songs and sayings

Like the lines of Humpty Dumpty and his wall

Like stories of Arthur and Gwenevere

And simple folklore tales

I smiled and held it in my hands but my time was brief

Another will find it one day and there will be relief

But before their secret can be understood

It will be hidden again - because it should

 

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  • earthstar
    June 13, 2007

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    The quest for heaven is left in the road map called the bible. The Lords leads each in his own special way. I like how you displayed the side of the seekers. This is a very in depth write. One must ponder over the words to find the treasure that truly is hidden. Until it is reveal to the reader. I may be wrong it not about the lost faith it about finding the mystery of faith. Allowing it to work in one heart. Like my friend would say. One can bring a horse to water. It the horse who needs to decide if it wants the water or rejects the water. Very well wrote and expressed.

  • luvdrkchocolate
    June 2, 2007

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    Oh. This is a very interesting poem that you have written here. I think that you have put a lot of time and effort into this because it seems to be a whole complete story instead of just pieces. It did seem kind of sad that you wouldn't share what you understood with others but I guess that is your choice. It does sound interesting though and I think that you have done a good job of expressing yourself.


    • Gypsy Rover
      June 2, 2007
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      The reason I didn't tell anyone what I found is because no matter how hard I tried I was not understood. I realised the secret can never be told - it has to be found which is why it is hidden again.. with my clue added for another enlightened soul to find. Of course they won't be able to tell anyone either.. such is the nature of the object.


  • HeavenScent4U
    June 2, 2007

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    i'm sure this is a wonderful poem but i am not in the frame of mind to read something so long at the time so i will bookmark it and read it later this evening. as to not waste your points as you paid for them, i will give you applause


  • ibsons hysops
    June 2, 2007

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    loved tghe fourth and the second to the last as well as the last stanza to this! this is so well written, that you literaly take my breath waway! great job!


  • Mrs Mulholland
    June 2, 2007

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    Humpty Dumpty has a lot to answer for. An intriguing poem about the loss of faith. Faith is easier to abandon if you never had any in the first place.

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