Damnation
Fall into temptation
Engulfed in Hell's eternal fire
Sinking in satan's wickedness of muck and mire
Brought to you by your lustful and sinful desire
Turning your back on heavenly bliss
Choices made are amiss
The abyss
Author notes
Option #17
Tros-par-Huit Form
3 stanzas, eight lines
3,6,9,12,12,9,6,3 syllable count
aab bb ccc rhyme
last line must be the title
In a list
A contest entry
- Tons Of Options! by Erin200.
434 points, ended June 16, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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great write i truly love it!!!!!!! continue writing and good luck in the contest!
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Thank You
Helloi, I am so glad you enjoyed reading. Thank you for the great comment. You take care, Sandy
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Mom...I love you...
Others may guess your thoughts from what you say,
As storms are guessed from clouds where darkness broods.
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Lovely Comment
Hello, Thank you for the nice comment. It was very sweet and most appreciated. Always so nice to read your beautiful comments!!! You take care, Sandy
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this is great! i love the shape of this form. i love the message you have. it is quite clear. more people need to see this! keep writing! thanks for sharing! God bless you always
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Great Write Sis
Hello Debilynn, Thanks for the great comment. Always nice to hear from you. Hope you are feeling better. You are in my thoughts and prayers. Sandy
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Great Comment!!!
Thank you Deb, I so appreciate your nice comments. Bless you. Take care, Sandy
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Wow... dark and mucky, but I guess that is the future without redemption. Well done!
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Nice Comment
Thank you Michael. I guess Hell is dark and mucky, Hope I don't find out the hard way if it is or not. Thanks for taking the time to read and coimment. Always a pleasure my friend. Take care and have a great day. Sandy
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Good
I wish more people understood that our eternal destiny is determined by the choices we make as we walk through this life. 1 Corth. 10: 13 tells us that God always restrains temptation, holding it just short of it being able to overwhelm the believer.That means when we give in to temptation, it is a choice we have made.We therefore have no right to complain about the consequences of our choices. You have encapsulated this truth beautifully in this work. Well done....as usual. -
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Wonderful Comment!!!!
Good morning, Your comment was wonderful. Very uplifting. God Bless you. Have a wonderful Sunday. Take care, Sandy
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wow. I love it. It was probably a very challenging job to write it. Thanks for entering my contest. Once again a great poem.
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Nice Comment
Thank you for reading and the nice comment. Im so appreciate it. You take care, Sandy
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BEAUTIFULLY EXPRESSED!
I believe we all have made choices we later regret, some bad ones and others where at the time is seemed right. a poem from the heart.
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Wonderful Comment!!!
Thank you Kevin. A pleasure to read!!!You take care, Sandy
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good write no matter how you put it
very good job on covering all of the bases.
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Thanks Mac!!!!
Great comment. Thanks a bunch. You have a great day.
You take care, Sandy
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Sometimes
It can be self inflicted. But at other times the human side just breaks down. well done poet
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Thank you Bob!!!
Good morning my friend. I want to thank you for stopping by. I so appreciate the comment you left. Take care, Sandy
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