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Poem About Writing a Poem About a Poem About a Poem

                ~  after Kowit, after Vikatanitamba



The poet writes of lust, hints but does not mention
certain touches. The reader writes the details,
the untied knot, the fallen dress.

I’m at my table, a stack of white paper
inviting my pen, one hand writing,
the other pressed between my legs.





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p 224

just for cv, and the hell of it

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  • B2oH
    June 6, 2007
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    EXACTLY!!!

    The reader..fills in the details because those things in the mind are most inviting..and most personalized. Abstraction works, I have come to see with a vision of clarity.

    Do you really write on paper?

    • zara
      June 6, 2007
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      To be clear, maybe they're all failures, but I mean the ones about which there is absolutely no doubt.

      (Christ, I put my foot in it, didn't I)

      • B2oH
        June 7, 2007

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        Well..yes..probably....(your foot that is)...but with your hand between your legs, it's probably easy to trip. You might consider reader safety in the future.

    • zara
      June 6, 2007
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      Yes, I really write on paper. This series (responding to poetry) has had to be on plain white 8 1/2 by 11 stock. Sometimes, though, I use a cahier-sized notebook, made by Moleskin, black cover. My pen has to be a Pilot Hi-Tecpoint V5. I'm very sloppy, which is good, because one will ever be able to read my failures.


  • macandrew
    June 5, 2007

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    The reader writes the details

    This is the other part I love about poetry. The reader fills in the blanks and that allows my/your words to mean what they do to us, but give freedom to all other interpretations.

    Well written.
    John

    • zara
      June 6, 2007
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      True, isn't it - it's not the poem that's intended, it's the poem that's received - that's what's important.

      Thank you for dropping by, John.


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    June 4, 2007
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    • zara
      June 6, 2007
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      You have a lot of nerve, girl, giving me such a "comment".

      • ArtFullyMe gold member
        June 6, 2007

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        well you know it was like this, I thought about it, looked at it and all I could do was smile at how perfectly it made the point..


  • porksnorkel
    June 3, 2007

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    Well, what would a meta meta meta metaplume be without a chubby-inducing finish?

    nothing. That's what.

    with it, brilliant.

    • zara
      June 3, 2007
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      I was thinking about you, of course.


  • Dienush
    June 3, 2007

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    Hmm. I love how this poem describes (or suggests!) how a good poem is to be written. The title fits well and is very original, and the ending is rather alluring, Though I won't pretend I understood the last bit. But it's a great poem, really.

    • zara
      June 3, 2007
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      Or do you mean you'll pretend to not understand?
      Thank you DianaBlue.


  • Emerald13
    June 3, 2007

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    wonderful ... tight, concise and has me vacillating between poet and reader, nodding at the 'just is' ... nicely done >>> gina

    • zara
      June 3, 2007
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      Thanks Gina. Hey, did I see your name at the Gaz? (or is that a secret)


  • marc creamore
    June 2, 2007

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    Sensual and brilliant . . . volumes spoken in a few short lines . . . every word grabbed my attention . . . oh so well done!!!!!!

    • zara
      June 3, 2007
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      Thanks Marc. Great weather we're finally having, eh?


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    this is quite a refined piece, six lines leave me with a sea of incredibly rich visuals and complex emotions... and it ends with my favorite three words.

    brilliantly done.


    al


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    I once did a 'conceptual' art project called..
    Bottle containing 100 drawings of a bottle containing 100 drawings
    which has nothing to do with this poem but the title reminded me.


    neat!

    • zara
      June 2, 2007
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      It's the old thing we did as kids, right? Mirror-in-a-mirror trick. Or TV on the TV - I still love it when there's a monitor on the news that shows the news.

      It has everything to do with this poem, really.
      Thanks, Aristocratic One.


  • cvillelisa
    June 2, 2007

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    One of my favorite poems in the book, how'd you know?

    I remember we once had a discussion about lust, sex - passion being at the center of our poems no matter what they were about - that they all seem to be spun out from that wild female place.

    You know, last night I nearly said "now, put something up so I have something to read when I wake up"

    Swear. A poem for me and the hell of it - honored I am.


    • zara
      June 2, 2007
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      Yes, it's a brilliant (!) little thing, isn't it - shining brightly I mean. Of course, it's a LIE, dear Lisa, since it's Steve Kowit writing from a woman's perspective.

      The truth in lies.

      Now you have to write one about this one, you see - TAG! - you're it!




      p.s. Swear, eh? that's from the poem too. Thief!


  • Cat gold member
    June 2, 2007
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    the best first stanza i have read on AP

    • zara
      June 2, 2007
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      Oh my! That's a lot of first stanzas! LOL. Thank you for visiting, Mary.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    I've just read p 224 .. and this is spot on the money!!

    it's as they say... the money shot ... well done Miss Z.. now it all makes sense

    • zara
      June 2, 2007
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      Well, now, if you're REALLY bored some time, you can trace them all back, can't ya? I hope, after such a wait, Luminous is as much pleasure to you as it has been to me.

      It is more fun, I'm sure, seeing the connection. I'm thinking I'd like to see a book of poetry like that - poet's responses to poems. Should I shop that idea and make my first million? LOL

      thanks, FillyGill.


  • jonnyfaint
    June 2, 2007
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    great. very good. your lines are like small peices of fruit. They are full of flavor.

    • zara
      June 2, 2007
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      oh thank you! What a lovely comment!

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