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My baptizing

Glorious songs of love
Striking near
Float away
From me
My tears
To be caught by those who hear
Oh we descend
Upon
Those closed ears
Has it been years
We fall slowly to see
-nothing new
Our shadows showing
So much larger
Our blue impressions
Behind my touch
There is love
A kiss of me
You beg to steal
The pain you wish to share
Standing on the wrong side of a breakdown
Her head upon my breast
One arrow slowly passing through
Dressed in my blood
As my heart chases your nakedness
Tender now
As one slowly forgets
I feel her tears
my baptizing

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  • PastelMoons gold member
    September 24, 2007
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    "I feel her tears
    my baptizing"
    Brilliant and uniquely
    refreshing
    I love it
    Impressed ~Pastel

    • Brokenpen
      September 27, 2007
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      thank you much for taking the time to read my words


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 2, 2007

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    Wow..what a deeply touching and beautiful write, sweetie!
    So very deeply personal this is!
    Thank you for sharing you!