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It'd Be A Movie, If We Were On Horseback

Life,
like a movie..
True love,
the only true existence..

I need him,
cliche as it is..
I can't live without him.

I'm addicted to him,
he is my life, my fire, my breath, my heart.
I've been hurt, like many by many.
I've been hurt, unlike many by the same.
He watched me go through my pain.
I watched him go through the same.
And we were always there for each other.
Only I was the ignorant one.

Since the womb, we known each other.
We grew up together,
we cried together.
He knew from the local church bus that I was the one.
I thought "holding hands were for married people."

Just like a movie,
we grew up together as friends.
In the eighth grade, we tried a while.
But ignorant me, I shielded him from my damage in the summer.
I created his torment.
I gave that bitch a chance to drive him insane.
But I was the only sanity he had.

I gave in, after too much heartache,
and self destruction...
I stopped pretending, and looking for "the right one."
As did he.
Finally, not a moment to soon, fate brought us together again.
For one last try.
I now realize how stupid I have been.
My true love has been there patiently waiting for me since we were born.

I love him dearly,
and we are to wed.
My lifetime lover,
my high school sweet heart,
my fiance.
We saved each other from torment.
Without each other...there would be no purpose to live.

He is my air, my sun, my life, my heart, my soul mate, my wedding ring, my sanity, my teacher, my lover, my joker, my master, my one and only, my true love.
I'm addicted to him.
I could never survive without him.
I'd never have a happily ever after.


Life,
like a movie..
True love,
the only true existence..

Author notes

~tearsofasith~

[option 4]

being with my partner and how it makes me feel
or
"cupid"

i trying to get across the fact that i love this person

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  • IvyCoveredRose
    May 11
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    ^_^

    beautiful write!!! one that should be published


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    Wow, this was deeply touching & a beautiful love poem.
    Wonderful expressions and feelings just pour from the page. Excellent write..

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • Rock-Junkie
    August 8, 2008
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    BEST LOVE POEM

    Im Thinking That This One Is Your Best One!!!

    it just shows the real you, as well as how you truly feel bout austin. I think this is the one!!


  • Shifting
    July 17, 2008
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    mmmm, this feels like ice cream on a hot summer's day. I like the fact that you had known each other since you were born and had always been the other's shoulder to cry on. It's a very sweet poem.

    he is my life, my fire, my breath, my heart.

    this is truly lovely, I absolutely love that he's the fire and heart.
    thank you for entering.


  • BandGeek101
    March 31, 2008

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    I could see how the imagery is going it has a great flow to it I thought it was really good keep it up


  • SincerelyMegan
    March 3, 2008

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    This is great.
    Just what I was looking for!

    it told about such a difficult time for
    you finding that certain someone.
    :] Good luck!


  • Raging Chaos
    March 3, 2008
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    its cute && Cliche but it works
    =]
    great write and good luck


    -Raging Chaos


  • Pureisolation
    March 2, 2008

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    wow wonderful poem. I really liked reading this. I love how it tells a story, truly a beautiful piece'


  • The Slant
    February 27, 2008

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    "since the womb" doesn't fit with your style. i really like the list at the end. the title is great. some of it doesn't demonstrate mastery of poetic language, but in general a very heartfelt and well-written poem.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 15, 2008

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    this is really sweet! I especially love the title, it's really nice. I suppose the way you have described this, it's true.


  • xorandomxo
    February 13, 2008
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    wow amazing poem.
    love the title.
    thanks for entering.
    good luck.

    unbreakable♥


  • K1r5ty
    February 12, 2008

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    Such a sweet loving poem from beginning to end my dear!

    a love story so powerful it shed a tear! now how this person feels very much! Fairytales i hope come true!!!

    Thank you for entering and good luck


  • pantress silver member
    January 28, 2008
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    I guess sometimes fairy tales do come true. Until then i'll just dream.


  • Turning-To-Dust
    January 28, 2008
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    This actually made me cry.
    I am only 13, but my best friend, he loves me.. and i cant think like that for him. I have tried but it just wont work. And when i think about it i've had many awful relationships, that hurt me.. and in the end he is the one that always has stuck by my side.
    You give me hope.
    Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    January 21, 2008

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    from beginning to end ...wow! what a beautiful love story...pulls a sigh straight from the heart Thank you so much for sharing and entering


  • katie-jo
    January 11, 2008

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    This is so sweet. Love is such a broad subject to write poetry on.

    Thank you for entering and all the best in the contest.

    kate-flamingo


  • Tattboyspet
    September 17, 2007

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    ummmm ... you already HAVE a trophy for this one - perhaps I wasn't clear enough in my contest - I shall go and change it now


  • Rock-Junkie
    June 5, 2007
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    YAY!! Congrats on your Bronze winning!
    Im proud of ya! see.. writing something at almost 1 in the morning isnt always bad...
    Again, Congrats!!


  • loveisthemoment
    June 4, 2007

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    This is beautiful. I hope that someday I find a love like yours. Thank you so so much for entering and following the rules! Good luck!
    Love always,
    ~SA


    • alandriel1138
      July 6, 2007
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      Thanks!!

      wow, thanks...I really doubted this poem, mainly b/c I wrote it so early in the morning. I just signed on to check up on things and what a thing to find. Thank you for your true thoughts and the bronze. I like the poem now. lolz =^.^= oh, and I'm sure you will. I think everyone has a special someone just for them.


  • Rock-Junkie
    June 2, 2007

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    wow my dear! this is such a great poem..
    wish I had love - but you know about all that

    wait.. did I read that right?? FIANCE?! maybe in the heart yall are, but not for anyone else to see.

    Im really happy for you. cause I have seen what you've been through, and all hes done and such. lauren IS a bitch who needs to die. also, I wish yall the happiest lives as possible. and MAYBE IF ((key words)) something happens and yall arent together, just know that fate might bring you another, or maybe bring him back once more. yall are the greatest couple I know... I wish I had yall's love. but I have no one...

    this is a great write again girlie. and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

    dont worry... IT MAKES SENSE!! though you wrote it at 12-1 in the morning. hehe

    I LOVE YOU!! bye

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