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Under A Blue Moon~

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Out of Sight, Out of my Mind!

I think…zombies ate my brain, but swear;

the boogey man is waiting in the streets of Dublin

wearing Superman’s underpants dripping with the blood of a ruby…

I found it, in my underwear drawer!

Moving just into spring, I fell for the lies under a blue moon while

looking through the window over the neighbor’s fence.

Am I living on the edge?

Failing humanity?

Well…they think I’m crazy!

 

 

 

Author notes

I chose one title but included all 15 contest titles within the poem I created!

Titles:
1. The Boogey Man is Waiting
2. The Streets of Dublin
3. Superman's Underpants
4. Blood of a Ruby
5. Living on the Edge
6. I Found it in My Underwear Drawer
7. I Fell for the Lies
8. Under a Blue Moon
9. Out of Sight, Out of My Mind
10. They Think I'm Crazy
11. Failing Humanity
12. Over the Neighbor's Fence
13. Through the Window
14. Into Spring
15. Zombies Ate My Brain

Very cool picture from; www.wunderground.com

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  • JohnnyD gold member
    June 23, 2007

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    Very well done! evidence of ingenuity and multitasking thought patterns......TIA.....pretty name,(Short for?) what does it really stand for? Truth In Action???


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    June 19, 2007
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    Inspirational!

    Very creative - it's always you who can pull out another unique and interesting piece from nowhere - anytime - blue moon or not, you've got the genuine poet muse's gift Tia!! Congratulations on the silver trophy!!! Write on - Cyn


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    June 11, 2007

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    hehe..I just love the playfulness in this...great use of the tiles..I tried this once my self...not to this success, though. Cute and silly. Love it.


  • Morrigan Trinity
    June 10, 2007

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    I love the picture. I love the poem. I love that you used every title that I offered. This is such a fun piece. Thanks for entering!


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    June 6, 2007

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    hahaha, very very creative and fun to read. Stringing together titles can be fun, I have tried the same thing a time or two. Great job!


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    June 5, 2007

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    This is just excellent fun writing here! You mooshed them together just right! This shines in particular:
    "Moving just into spring,
    I fell for the lies under a blue moon while
    looking through the window over the neighbor’s fence.
    Am I living on the edge?"

    Shiny somtim' somtim'?


  • superstition
    June 5, 2007

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    This looks like it would've been so hard, but you did such a good job of weaving all those titles together into one poem! Those aren't exactly easy titles to work with neither...pretty quirky and unique! I love this for a change-of-pace work from you. I enjoyed the goofiness you had in there, but somehow you also managed to come up with a beautiful sounding metaphor as well:

    "I fell for the lies under a blue moon while
    looking through the window over the neighbor’s fence."

    That line felt so different compared to the rest of them, and that breakage was awesome! Great work on this.


  • onesugar gold member
    June 4, 2007

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    FANTASTIC!!!

    I absolutely loved this poem,how you have intertwined all of the titles is just sheer genius.A truely brilliaint poet.Michelle


  • Talking Toni gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    This is so awesome.......................

    I felt like I was reading science fiction throughout this piece!!! It has humor to go along with it. Your imagery here painted a colorful vivid picture in my mind of a dark sky with a blue moon and you holding superman's underpants dripping with blood of a ruby!!! What a sight to see....lol!!! Thanks for sharing and I wish you luck with your entry in that contest!!!!!~~Toni~~

  • onesugar gold member
    June 2, 2007
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    wow

    Just BRILLIANT.


  • LAPoe gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    THIS IS A MASTERPIECE OF THE TRULY BIZARRE, Tia
    I love the way your mind is expanding, by
    blowing itself out of proportion then regrouping
    in crazy wonderful fragments!! You have written
    yourself into the realm of the weird
    I am truly pleased laurie.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    June 2, 2007

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    What an excellent piece you
    have penned here! Well done
    my friend and thanks a lot
    for sharing this here! Best
    of luck to you with it in the
    contest! Keep up the great
    work here!



    Jeremy0826


  • Quiet places
    June 2, 2007

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    Excellent Write!

    Questionable sanity is a virtue Tia!! Very creative write! I love how it leads your reader up to the last line so well. Love the imagery and was wondering about who put the ruby in your underwear drawer. Great arrangement of the words also. Your pal, Don


  • hoodoolover silver member
    June 2, 2007

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    Love it big time. I think it was supremely creative of you to use all the titles, I was at first really surprised because it is such a departure from your normal subject matter, but it works quite well, especially around the full blue moon


  • arafura gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    very clever...!

    Very clever piece of writing! The way you used all the titles to construct one work was great...

    Good luck in the contest!


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 1, 2007

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    I don't think you're crazy...but I sure was glad for your author's comments...I was gettin' worried 'boutcha for a minute. Good luck in the contest, my Friend. Wanda


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 1, 2007

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    Splendid and definitely outside the coloring lines for you, but it once again shows your sheer talent, not only for pulling it off and making it a beautiful portrait of prose but Hell Girlie, using all those words/titles!...Wooohoo! You rock! ~~The Manager~~


  • individuality gold member
    June 1, 2007

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    Line one: love it! i keep looking for a doorway back into mine but i just keep bouncing against invisible boundaries and hitting the tree across the road.
    Line two: love it! this line make me think of food lol well zombies are flesh eaters and eaters of flesh eat meat so steak and chips please.
    Line three: love it! i won't go to dublin then, i think i will go to the fridge.
    Line four: love it! ohh sexy underpants, ruby's cut herself i think though.
    Line five: love it! ah i was hiding it there but now you have found it.
    Line six: love it! yeah watch those lies under a blue moon, the lies above it are nicer.
    Line seven: love it! oh i do love a good nosey lol
    Line eight: love it! yeah step forward a bit, oops, i meant back!
    Line nine: love it! aye we need to study more, get our grades up to scratch.
    Line ten: married it, took it on honeymoon to hawaii then partied.



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