As I wish you farewell
I want to breakdown and cry
And the train starts to excel
I get on the train and wish that I could fly
Fly back to you, back to the train station
But I just let go of your hand and watch the sky
Tears brim at the notion
Of leaving you
As the ocean fills my veiw
Because I left my heart at the train station with you.
Author notes
For Contest: R o s e B l o s s o m 1 0 0 "Don't die live life"
Many people are giving me advise on this subject so I would like to clear it up. I am not writing from my point of view, this was inspired by a prompt and as such I created a character to speak through. I appreciate the advise but it is not my point of view.
RoseBlossom100
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Very beautiful. I like the idea. I really wish it would have flowed more ~ it would have made it even more beautiful... But, that doesn't matter ~ it still is a great poem
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beautifully written! i loved all the emotion you put in to it! thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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A beautifully written poem! I really enjoyed reading this piece! great write! Thank you so much for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
-Steve- -
Very beautiful and interesting. Not whats on my mind but you have penned a lovely sad write here.
Much luck.
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The sweetness of tears of goodbye.
aahh love this is sweet and tender and sad but memories can last a long time but remember, he will alwayslook the same as you saw him last ..until you see him again and then there will be the change.. good work .. keep it up. Well done.
Bazza
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