When I first laid eyes on her I new she would be fun
Everything was going wild like the setting of the sun
She was in the cocktail bar shaking that thing
When my heart soon began to sing
I saw her glistening outfit made of leather
Later she sat there and I told her I was a poet
she said thats really clever
She had this amazing look on her eye
I made my advance we talked and then
she grabbed my arms and said don't be shy
She made me feel like an innocent child
We made our way back to hers thats where things got very wild!
She reminded me of one of them tropical fruits
Things were getting wilder wilder when she took off her boots
She was a party that wouldn't stop rocking
She really looked attractive in them fish net stockings
The touch of her skin was o so smooth
Our bodies where wrapped in each others love
We felt like nothing could disturb us
And we where being watched by the stars above.
We slept untill the morning then
My heart gave me a warning that she was gone
There was a note on the side which read
"goodbye Mr poet you will always be within my head signed kinky boots"
To this day when I think of her my eyes go red
I just gaze and wonder why she fled
Author notes
Sexy enough?"
A contest entry
- Kinky is the Game by HaileeDear.
300 points, ended March 2, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Haha, that was pretty awesome lol I like this one, I was totally drawn to the title, very nice. what made you think of this one?
Shawn
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The song real lady marmalade by pink christina and lil kim aswell as a girl i liked lol
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Haha, cool. I don;t eally listento music so it is safe to say I have no idea who those people are.
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i loved it
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I'd rather start out with the bad. There are a couple spelling errors but thats no big deal. Make sure that if you're going to try and rhyme every word that you keep it consistant.
ON WITH THE GOOD
You had great imagery and emotion. You described the way she moved and the way she looked. I loved that. Some of the lines you used made it cute instead of hardcore sex with a stranger sex.
good luck in the contest.
xoxo
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AWWW.. IM AROUSED!!
wooo... i love this poem<3!!
full of emotion and total appreciation for every part of that girls body.. I love boys who can look at the whole women and not just certain parts of her body! and who also note how she felt and how her eyes looked and sparkled...
"bodies wrapped in eachothers love"
loved this phrase.. thats exactly what sex is its not sex its love-making entwined together... lost in eachothers love.. sharing eachothers body reaching the stars above
absolutely loved this poem....xo!! <3!!
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I thought this was a really good poem, Matthew. I enjoyed this a lot because you described the girl you're talking about very well for the kind of poem this happens to be.
My favorite lines:
First of all, lines 12 and 13 really explained the girl and how she was a bit.
Keep up the damn good work, Matthew!
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I love thios babe seriously we must collab when i get the time are can I do a part two you rock baby and that name i admire everything about this little miss kinky boots i love everything ~ jewels ~
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This is excellent whitewolf 16 keep it up
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wkd
very good work keep it up
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