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{ i love you,now die }

you know i love you but i cant tell you why
i think that in my dreams all you do is die
im always hiding and waiting for you
but you know that there's nothing you can do
lying alone in your dark room
just awaiting your miserable doom
all alone and nothing to do
just remember that im going to kill you
you used to be my everything and all that i adored
but now your nothing but a toy for me when i get bored
you think that i'm harmless
but you dont even know
killing the ones that love me
killing them very,very slowly
that i lie and wait for you, until you get home
i have this strange obsession to kill you in the night
but i wonder if anyone can see the light
digging up another hole again
carefully luring you to my dark den
you try to get away
but you know it wont work
you know you'll never see the light of another day
through my killing obsession
remember you used to by my only true depression
killing you slowly and watching you die
i cant help but only say good-bye
filling in the holes again
and washing off the blood
slipping in the damp thick mud
hoping you'll forgive me some time down the road
here i go again killing another that i love
hiding your body in a secluded cove
hoping that the next one i love wont die like you
tearing out your heart
ripping out your lungs
killing you slowly
your drowning in your blood again
drowning in your tears again
tears running sown my face
im the only one out of place
stitting here in my woven desire
watching the blood go higher and higher
watching the flames jump up high
and staring at you while you die
hoping that i caused you pain
and watching as it starts to rain
sitting here all ashamed
and hoping that you wont be named
i told you i loved you
thats why you had to die
you thought it was weird
but i didnt care
now look what i have here
your burning heart
and my dark desire
just remembered i loved you but you had to die

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  • know one
    February 28, 2008
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    thanks for entering

    great write

  • ms. kitty kat
    November 2, 2007

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    from contest holder

    I loved it. Great write, filled with so much hate. very good job especially with the imagery. good luck in my contest, thank you for entering

    Kat


  • Nicotine Eyes
    November 2, 2007
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    wow,filled with hate lust.its great. Best Of luck in my contest and ty for entering.


  • drkmisery1
    June 7, 2007

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    Im just going to go ahead and jump into this
    killing them very,very slowly
    the slowly should probably be slow for the fact that it flows better and it still rhymes with know 2 lines before it, also the line that i lie and wait for you, until i get home seems out of place almost like it was just added in there after or a break in writing where you couldn't get your train of thought back, while on the good side the descprition was great and the suspense that the speed of the voice set was a key part of this write, it could be improved upon a bit but it is a good write over all just needs a little tweaking, good luck in 2007 Raven Contest Qualifier and good luck in all of your future writes


  • NickelleteXninja
    June 5, 2007
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    the begining reminds me off this movie i own malevolence.. the guy kid naps a kid teaches him to kill. the guy knows hes in teh closest and that the boys gonna kill him but he cant fight it

    this was deranged in a way but a little to typical it wasnt so much as just yours but oh so many thrown together

    thanks for entering though


    • lil lette
      June 5, 2007
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      huh? wut do u mean it was so many thrown 2gether? cuz i thought of that in biology... an in the moment type thing.


  • thelovesongwriter
    June 4, 2007
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    wow! i loved it! but you go on and off on you rhymes.. but i guess that's ok. good luck to you


  • Logans-Mommy
    June 1, 2007

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    NICE!!!! i love this, you need to fix the spelling of some things, people are picky when it comes to contests..but other than that you have dont great!!!!


    i love this one!!!


    ~Fangs

    • lil lette
      June 4, 2007
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      thanx i liked this one 2!surprisingly i thought of it when i was sitting here during biology.so yeah i jsut commented on this guys eyes and melinda is still laughing.


  • The Cube
    June 1, 2007
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    Very crepy and a very good write. Lved how you explained just how you will kill them. Great job!

    • lil lette
      June 4, 2007
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      well i guess that i was jsut following one of the topics and i guess that i did a good job. thanx for holding the contest.

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