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A Present for You

At the train station
my heart still beating
wrapped in velvet
this present for you
a bombshell organ
being stepped on
by bleeding shoes
and raven-hearted souls
who ride chained metal coffins

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  • Naridill
    June 2, 2007

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    Definately close to what I was thinking. Indeed alot of imagery and saddened yet impulsive views. Nicely done.
    Much luck.